http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...4878#post934878
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=94240

Triggers Release....Human Beings Deceased
Couldn't Be a While Protestin And Infecting The Streetz
Polluted Sea's, Filled With Soulja'z Debris On Our Knees
Deaths Increase
Crying Saluteing Their Respected Deeds
People Aint GeTTing What They Need..
Addressin The People With Our Freedom Of Speech
Blessin Them Each Handing Them Peace
Ease And SqueeZe The Breeze Giving Them Free Oppurtunites WIth Demo-racy
Countries Contained Watching My Fleets Flee
My People in Pain Yet I Keep watching Endlessy
Completely INSain , See'We're Seeking For This To End
We Exsposed Their Acid, Cloths Reaked Wit Gases
Bodies Decaying By Masses With No Gas Masks
Complicate Can't Concentrate It's Fate Only Bodies Dropping At an Increasin Rate
Tention Passin,Blow's Blast in,Empires Now Crashing,
Cilvian's Scattering,Into-Stores-Millions are Trashing
Wealthy Ones Buying Expensive Fashions , While The Poor Ones Are Deeply Suffering
Without The USA Iraq Wouldnt be Lasting
He Shows no Passion,Leaving his Men in "Closed-Caskets
A Chance-To Take a STance-By Holding their Ground's,
Cowards Behind "Romance Thats Trying to be Found".....
To Try too Advance,But Then Fail,You Can Still be Proud
The Past Still Lurks, Death-Drugs it all Still Hurts,
Preying For Something to Work, Acting As If IM Too Good For Church.....
For a Better Life I begin too Search, Feeling The-End-As if i was Born wit-a Curse

This was good.....I liked the subject....Nice flow.....Like your choice of vocab.......Although some parts of your flow was shaky....Some bars were longer than others.....Other than that.....good overall post...

Skill wise I aint a herb but registered month wise I am a herb. Anyways upping

where did dis newb come from wit dis KRS-1...PUBLIC ENEMY type bullshyt......anyhow das ya vibe soulja'man!!

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Shut the fuck up before I have you banned

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dawg are U serious .....UR threatning me wit tha prospect of bein BANNED .....am sorry lemme rephrase my post by sayin simply.......>> FUCK YOU .......listen bitch U wanted feedback....datz my opinion....I did'nt like tha shyt nah if U wanna lift up ya mini skirt and run to a mod ta have me banned fa my thoughtz then go right ahead...I guess U expected nuthin but good comments aye....FUCK U HO


P.S. FUCK YOU AGAIN

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Ok Net-Gangsta

im ready to battle, u drop first, 10 lines max

yo, this wasn't bad at all...

flowed for the most part

good descriptive words (imagery)

my only suggestions would be to even out your bars (some were stretched) and maybe try using multies.