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12-02-03, 06:10 PM | #1 | |||||||
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Get on the Mic.....
IP: 07E0 A9F2
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...4753#post954753
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...4793#post954793 http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=95748 Rhyming’s a way of life like a fucking knife… cutting through society’s slice Don’t think twice I didn’t… don’t be timid… it makes me livid -Tip the pivot and really give it ya all… stand tall Don’t be a small shrinking violet Ya typed it… so get on the mic -An voice ya fight… ignite it… the night… despite the lack of light You’ll still stand bright...so long as ya words flow fuckin tight… Don’t be nervous…cos you can curve this…jus be thin’nk assertive… What’s the purpose… of biding hiding through the shadows shakin… Get off ya arse and start the making… squash the faking… relieve the aching From money taking soul breaking back to the streets…back to the making -to Where it belongs…leave the commercial songs…jus droning on “I shot him, im hard as fuck”, with a bullet stuck... this dawg is gone beyond ya help…I feel ya pain it’s a fucked up game… who’s in the frame? That’s my point there it goes again…an endless circle shifting the blame Enflame, turn ppl insane…moving the minds, put them back to pre-fame… First draft of an audio verse……… |
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12-02-03, 06:14 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
dont start saying the vocab could use some work cos thats the way i intended it.....i do plenty wit hvocab in other shit,,\ight...pZ
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12-02-03, 06:23 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: 1B3B C284
this was a good audio peace i think it will sound good, it had a good flow actually had some good vocab you dont seem to think so though...i think you had some very thought out lines in this well done...peep word p'z 7 realest...pz
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12-02-03, 07:35 PM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: E38C 4580
This Will Definately Turn Into An Ill Open Mic. The Flow Was Great. . I Didn't Lose It While I Was Reading. Props For That. Everything Else Was Good. No Complaints On Vocab or Structure. The Multi's Were Great When Used. Can't Wait To Peep The Next Draft.
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12-02-03, 07:39 PM | #5 | ||||
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IP: 5F2A E1C0
Vocab Could Use Sum Work.. lol
No But Seriously It Could. You Had An Ight Sense Of It But The Sense Of Knowing How To Use It Was Blah.. Threw The Flow Off Horribly.. The Depth Wasn't THere Potential Was, Just Learn How To Gain Up To It |
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12-02-03, 07:47 PM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
lol...thanx Aus.....playing ma words....get it...but nah thanx ....only a first draft.......taking it on for the final aight....pZ....any more?
oh an thanx to rule and formula aswell....... appreciated.... |
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12-03-03, 02:49 PM | #7 | ||||
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IP: 76B1 9A60
Yeah i agree this was alright man.....Your structure in this was good like usual lol....i wont comment on the vocab though lol....the flow in this was alright, could be a little better though, ive seen better from you...but this should be a good audio....overall this was alright..keep at it.
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12-03-03, 03:13 PM | #8 | |||||||
Just call me your Savior
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IP: F718 7AAD
“I shot him, im hard as f**”, with a bullet stuck... this dawg is gone
(edited for blocks at school's cpu...^) this line was pretty tite... anywayz... tha flow was off at times but it is an audio so that may chang wit tha way u rap it... the concept was nice although u didn't get into it for awhile... overall...nice drop...keep elevatin...
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12-03-03, 03:39 PM | #9 | |||||||
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IP: 202C A952
yeah yeah dunny this seems like a coo please... like to hear it on the audio track or somthin... but the vocab like the man's said... low on level status... but yeah like i said... coo peice
not wack... just needs small elevation... kill it kid... on3 |
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12-03-03, 03:49 PM | #10 | |||||||
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IP: D85C 59A5
personally I thought that it was okay but it wasn't the best flow. Given a little revision I think it could be completly on pac.pz and luv
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