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Old 12-03-03, 06:38 PM   #1
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NUCLEAR CONCEPTS: [feat] Robo - Whats the world coming to?

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http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...8001#post958001
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...8034#post958034
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...8047#post958047

(Robo)
What's wrong with the world today I don't know what it is,
I will tell ya it's kids haveing kids,
It's ya dad beating ya mom and acting like it none of ya biz,
It's H.I.V, s t d's,kkk mother fuckers hangen bothers from tree's//
Whys it gotta be this way,
Sick mother fuckers molesting kid's and acting like it ok,
People need ta get back in chruch and pray,
Armageddon could happen any day,
God is the only way,don't be the lamb that went a stary//
I might say some fucked up shit,
But when it comes down to it,
I would have ta admit, it's all lip,
I would never pull a pistol out and shoot from the hip//
Murders happening one by one,
Date rape by collage boy's thinking that shit is fun,
Now when kids have beef they end wit a gun,don't act like ya stunded//
Cost of fredom is way to hig, were not safe via land nor sky,
Why do so many have ta die//
Over dumb shit,
with ya daughter murdered laying some were in a ditch,
Because you had better thing's ta do you stuped bitch,
Peeps need ta take time ta sit wit there kid's,
Listen ta what they got ta say and be involed with there biz

(Deva)
As you look at society the normal is only a slice in the vast variety
Ya got rapists destroying lives.. turning would to wouldn’t try to be
And the pre-meditated murders by warped mindz striving unruly times
There’s crimes.. but then there’s crimes that cross the acceptable line
Deepening the cut putting fucked up forefathers protégé to the front.
Strengthen the evil.. weakening the strain of the judicial mainframe
Can put it right.. just gotta fight.. unite.. crush the shame n reclaim
The world.. find those to blame, segregate direct to relieve the ache
Emancipate a new era, steering clear of the fever.. sweeping the globe
Provoke the worthy to take a toke of courage to rid the rowdy few
Sumthins gotta give.. n start a new.. ‘Cos what’s the world coming to’?…..
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Old 12-03-03, 06:46 PM   #2
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This was a pretty good collab.....both of you came nicely i thought....Robo should work on his structure a bit though and try to make his lines around the same length so its structured pretty well, other than that his verse was pretty good i thought....deva's verse was structured nicely i thought....his vocab was good like usual lol...and both had pretty good flow....overall i thought this was a good collab..keep at it.
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Old 12-03-03, 07:56 PM   #3
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damn you guys did a great job i knew you 2 would work nice togeather im like a fucking genius and you cats are gifted as well as complimentory to one another this was hot twin
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Old 12-04-03, 04:23 AM   #4
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word, masta thnx for feed'n it...alteast some ppl doin it...lol.......pZ.....any more?...
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Old 12-04-03, 02:38 PM   #5
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damn, this was a great collabyou both had great lines and showed good talent both stayed on topic very well good read can youz drop an honest vote on my battle it's in my sig thanks
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Old 12-05-03, 06:52 AM   #6
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thnx ppl......appreciated
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Old 12-05-03, 06:30 PM   #7
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come on ppl...
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Old 12-05-03, 06:34 PM   #8
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yo uppin for some more feed back, come on peeps what u think of ur shit

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Old 12-05-03, 11:38 PM   #9
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im the shit cause i just got paid bigjoke is the shit cause he claims he got laid *by men* yes this is what i say nate gz a.k.a skilce r u ready r u ready r u ready 4 me nah bitch you aint ready for nate gz
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Old 12-06-03, 04:28 AM   #10
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yo deva, dope style you got there. that is tha kind of hip hop i'm feelin. straight talkin about the problems that this country and their rulers control our mindz. cool ass colabo.
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Old 12-06-03, 06:09 AM   #11
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good collab and concept. the meaning was deep and a lot of truth send in it.
good voacb, structure and flow on both accounts.

keep doin wat u do
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Old 12-06-03, 06:12 AM   #12
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This was a good collab.. The topic was good.. Both followed up on that equally good.. But their was no wordplay or metas.. So that was a major fall.. But the flow of each of yours was good.. But it lacked multis.. But it did have inners.. Overall.. The inners and your views is the only pro's to this piece.. Stay Up..

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