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Old 12-06-03, 03:19 AM   #1
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To Be

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I am
which means I'll be
but that's a question
can't you see?
to be or not to be
for me it's to be
if I choose to live
but then here no others will be
because the can't live with me
and if alone ill be
does it mean i'm made of steel
and if i'm made of steel
why i still want to be
to be found and to be seen
don't le them see
what it means to be me
and if they would me
then I couldn't be
because they'll be instead of me
so am I selfish to choose to be
or to let others be
but still not with me
the circle is closed
I see
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Old 12-06-03, 01:41 PM   #2
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this waws a sweet little poem, i felt that constantly using be and me got repetitive but at the same time still gave u the full effect of the poem, and the ending is charming, 1luv.
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