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Time..
IP: 8BEC CACE
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...5506#post975506
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...5506#post975506 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...5533#post975533 A minute...processed into time lost in a greater time Where..., the time is adding to losing your life's time And your life, each second is gradually losing power And your time increases in killing you, minute to hour The time you've wasted, without even using your mind And your time can't be returned, we cannot ever rewind The time I'm losing right now, looking for words to rhyme Describe my life? Half, must probably be a waste of time A quarter trying to find something else to do with my time And the Last quarter doing something, but still losing time It's a losing battle, between your life and your precious time Breathing each second and doing nothing, losing your time But hell, You seem to think you have so much time left A conquest, to search for further mysteries, though yet Your taking longer than you thought, maybe, even then Have that much time left, who knows when it might end Who knows if you'll recieve something drastic to finally die Who knows if you'll live to see tomorrow,losing your night Livin it up? Some say thats a waste of time, but it's your life Death or not, some have to realize... Time will always win...it keeps moving, while you live And after you Die...
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Over Weight
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hey bitch, were supposed to be cheech and chong, fuckerpoo,lol jk nice drop, good vocab, metas, blah blah, you know nothing much for me to penalize, just, did u name it "Time" because you used the word 15 times on 22 lines?? lol really though it was a good drop
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Straight Savage.
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IP: 8BEC CACE
^yeah...thats the whole concept...Chongitty Chong. Even duos need solo projects.
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Light Weight
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IP: E38C 4580
Real Nice Drop Skiddz. Feelin The Content. . Liked How Since The Title Was Time, That The Word Was Used Quite Often. Like Relik Said, Nothing Really To Penalize. . But Is There Every Anything I Need To Penalize In Any Of Your Pieces? Everything I've Read From You Has Been On-Point. Flow, Mutlis, Vocab, Everything In This Piece Was Good. Keep Um Comin.
-Formula. ** Drop Some Feed for The Ultimate Power Struggle Appreciate It. **
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IP: 409D DA38
it was a alright piece should fix on your structure and evelvate more on your vocab and wordplay
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Over Weight
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IP: 4577 CD9A
uppin for my man skiddz
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Straight Savage.
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IP: 8BEC CACE
^good looking,lol.
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Straight Savage.
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IP: 8BEC CACE
Time to read this piece, and get good feedback this time.
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Suspended Suspense
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IP: FAD9 BD2A
that was ill, for sure, great concept, had meaning, i definately was feelin it, you did use time quite a bit, the word started ringing in my head... time... time.... still doin it lol
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Straight Savage.
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IP: 8BEC CACE
Fuck Sleepers....
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This is my first post!
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IP: 3A79 B1A6
it was straight, flow was ight...
keep spittin
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Straight Savage.
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IP: 8BEC CACE
^care to respond, and stop gettin cheap posts to post half assed open mics and waste valueble time.
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Straight Savage.
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IP: 8BEC CACE
up
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IP: 4287 3F49
Just some opinions, peep. Try not to start the verse off with rhyming with the same word, The first bar is the jump-off. Rest was good
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IP: 0D29 2657
skidds...this was nice...more of a poem but nice none the less
topic was creative and had a twist vocab fit well within context very superflous nice man this shit was really deep i liked it peace |
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