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Old 12-14-03, 12:23 PM   #1
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PlEaSe ReAd!

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Back of the head all u gonna see is red Bitch ur dead when I pull out my glock nine and shoot 25 time, Flowin aint a crime its juss a simple little Rhyme that people make up, Stupid ass nigga shut the fuck up You stupid wanna be Fake Slut. Yo i come into da room and all you hear is boom I come out a da womb flowin an blowin round out the ass, out to da front porch and into grass ya go ya ho I aint playin no mo, Ak 47 Or a 12-Gauge Shotgun... u pick dick when u hear da click u betta start runnin cuz u know Im comin, Havin fun when Im stunnin with with a gun or two, u bitch ass dude u think im rude, U aint seen nuttin, speakin a nuttin I slapped two on ur gurlz belly button. Blast 13 caps why 13 Thats a lucky number, keep talkin bitch ill slice ya like a cucumber. Yo ur smellin like pussy juice slut go take a bath, Juss remember this is Only the after math. ~S-N~ Rep..03
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Old 12-14-03, 01:24 PM   #2
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...................too predictable man also u suck
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Old 12-14-03, 01:27 PM   #3
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.................what he said^^^^^^^^^^^^^6
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Old 12-14-03, 02:53 PM   #4
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^^lol yea dogg nice shit
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Old 12-14-03, 03:06 PM   #5
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Borin and plain look liek u throo bunch of words 2gether that just ryhmed
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Old 12-14-03, 03:08 PM   #6
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this shit was thug...
omg - 10/10 perfect peice.
then the crack high came off me
fucking 0/10
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Old 12-14-03, 03:11 PM   #7
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*walks in and sees this* OMG! What tha hell is this? Man, I mustve got lost or sumthin... *looks back* AIYYO!!! Sum1 get this shit outta here.... *looks back at tha weak shit* U need sum serious elevation work....
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Old 12-14-03, 03:35 PM   #8
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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback with or this will get closed...

And you guys should atleast give him some feedback to help him out, not just saying "you suck"

But yeah you need to elevate....you shouldnt put it in paragraph form though, cause it throws the flow off and makes it harder to read for some people, you should put it line on top of line so its structured good...also try adding some multies to this to help it with the flow and to make it better....your vocab should be up'd a bit as well....but just keep elevating and you will get there....and keep at it.
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