replied 2:
down 2 ride - young mike
FreeStylin' - Liba Dee
Influence (keystyle) - Echo

my emotion is rough and wavy like tha ocean!

(YJ)
Another day of my life passes by and I feel gloomy
these bitches leave me stressin I got played, they wrongly do me
she sent me into depression its like she strongly threw me
against the wall and had an image of another nigga in her eyez
now tha sun is gone, tha rain is pourin I'm seeing cloudy skies
but life goes on, now tha pain is soarin, little ol proud me dies
you're seeing a frown on my oval shaped face something thats surprises/
people around me, she was fake round people and most were to da guys/
I feel squared, caged in a small box like I'm in prison
my friend saw she was usin me I should of listened
I thought she was just jealous but she spoke tha truth
she left me hurt,fucked up, she came and broke my youth
been sweet since a Lil G now i sometimes gotta take charge
this bullshit left me kinda blown everywhere I go I barge
my anger is being shown I lacked school work
slept, chilled, put an end to my mac I would kirk
on anybody who asked about Brittney D
a loner didnt want people talkin to me
and this shit changed me both inside and outside for weeks
she was tellin lies when they asked I denied to speak
a nigga kinda still a little depressed but I'll play some R n B
it fucked me up also lyrically now I'm tryna find da star in me...

(Rule)
My eyes open I feel the vibrations of negitive energy
Smuthering my body dreaming of death in any creativity
People declare vibes of love hate and lust but deny
I need help a counciler docter to drop my wishes to die
Mom ignores my question or answers so simply then pauses
Turns to another activity ignores her lifes true natural causes
The t.vs volume is penatrating my ears my head it throbs
The ringin hurts more then when you get kicked in the knob
A blood clog is the phrase that inflatuates my lifes exsistance
Walking on a gravel road through life there is no leading prints
No blue print I can't even go 100 meters straight so why sprint
I just gradually proceed with a slow pace and a cupcake
Eatin my destiny like a fat man it's a common mistake
I'm tired of people claimen they real but really a phantom
Hopen that they actually like me..no..declared "nobody like em'
My life is torture smilen at day to act like i have affection
A one man army look in the mirrow I hide from my refection
I picked up the knife and died for my own abuse and protection
Everybody hates me nobodys loyal death was retaliation
Cuz I couldn't take the ways of understanding my frustration

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BEST OF YJ
Holla at cha Boi
Watch Me
Eyez of a Young Nigga

good verse man....uppen for some replies

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The Weathers Art
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My Teenage Eyes
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Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
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..both verses were descent..but I must say 'rule' had a better verse..his had a better flow,vocab and wordplay..not to take anything away from 'yj'..your's was alright too..nice work fellas..

i peeped a preview of YJ's last night, he came real nice, really elevated a lot since the first time i saw ya dropping...
flow was real good thru the whole piece, some deep lyrics...
Rule came good too, he had a more complex style to his lyics which made it that bit more deeper, but lacked in his rhyme scheme which YJ came nice in...

you both dropped well together, both got a mix of ya own style...

keep dropping. 1.

^^^^more deeper....come on D lol hahahaha

Its good to see you guys collab. Both have mad skill. I was feeling the whole thing. Nice word usage, vocab, and flow. It was a nice drop from both of you. Damn YJ, when you ganna agree to be in a crew? LOL ... But, nice drops from both. Exactly what I expected from you 2...

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I thought it was really good. It had some good ideas. I think the flow could use some work, but thats pretty much it. Keep at it.

Yeah i agree this was a good piece here....enjoyed the read.....both verses were structured pretty well, YJ just watch some of your lines length, but it was still good....flow was good in both verses, it stayed on through out the piece....you both had some good vocab and wordplay....keep at it.

thanx 4 da replies uppin

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BEST OF YJ
Holla at cha Boi
Watch Me
Eyez of a Young Nigga

i thought the topic was kept to reasonably well...both styles went well together and similar skill in my eyes..so...yeah not a bad collab..rule's was the better if i had to choose...just!....pretty good....pZ

ya i thought dis piece was dope and all
i enjoy'ed da read
keep at it

still uppin!

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BEST OF YJ
Holla at cha Boi
Watch Me
Eyez of a Young Nigga

yo i was feelin rule u know...he styles gud u know...but YJ i just cudnt get nuttin from it b...not dat it was bad...i was just feelin rules more....

it was hella good keep it upp