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07-27-04, 02:26 PM | #1 | |||
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forgotten flow diss: pt2
IP: 19F7 7629
yo,
I got moves to make, I'm a prove this dude is fake & how he's a bigger joke, then clowns boxing with heavy weight its true this kids bound gonna melt down like glass do cause forgotten a pussy, with thigh, breast & ass too Fuck battle, watch this door get pushed Who's this cat? only person that likes War is Bush Ya shook, I.E a monster you can see I'm harder I'll have ya fallin from buldings faster then Peter Parker Your trash that can type, I'm pass what you write Us on the same page? I'm on the next chapter in my life slice'in ya wide pipe, us sorda alike? i'll leave ya with one sneker so if ya clone us, u'll only be gaining u'r-self a pair of nikes BANG BANG EARLY.......... TAKE THAT.... |
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07-27-04, 02:40 PM | #2 | ||||
Banned!
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IP: 9EF2 7F0D
ok,that was good
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07-27-04, 02:52 PM | #3 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: EC0B 84C7
its was koo i liked
it nice punches n word play at da end had a nice flow was overall good |
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07-27-04, 03:38 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 7547 33BA
yea dat was pretty good 7/10
my fav line was : Us on the same page? I'm on the next chapter in my life
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07-27-04, 03:55 PM | #5 | |||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
Very simple verse no hate juss opinion/
It was nicely structured and ok wordplay/ Good flow could have been better/ But I feel you cause its juss a freestyle/ But you need to use more coplex wordplay to elevate the rhyme/ Also you gotta get them multis down, they will make the flow tight man/ Good piece I give it a 7.5/10, keep elevatin/ |
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07-27-04, 06:39 PM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: 9FB7 7C10
Man that was dope
the rhymes were cool |
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07-27-04, 08:47 PM | #7 | |||
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IP: 19F7 7629
thanks everyone for u'r feed back i love them all....
thanks i will keep trying to elevate more as much as i can.... and i will try multis but to me thats also a tad hard for me but will try captine.... |
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07-27-04, 09:20 PM | #8 | |||||||
bingo!
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IP: AAF4 20CB
comepletely wack.....structure was wack..all around wack....
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07-27-04, 10:04 PM | #9 | ||||||
fuck da hataz B.A.M 4 life
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IP: 53CB B4E1
so far every thread ive seen dis dude smoke lay sum feeedback all he say is whack...lmmao..n e ways good freestyle but uh da rhyme u read from my crew B.A.M.-my life u r retarded if u didnt think my verse was good n e ways nice drop no beef jus opinion cuz im of people on here hatin peace out 1 luv holla back 7-10
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07-27-04, 10:10 PM | #10 | |||||||
Umm...Yeah
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IP: 5043 32F4
Quote:
as you can see hes the only sane person in this thread and don't diss emcees who are better than you.
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07-27-04, 10:10 PM | #11 | ||||
Welcome 2 Dope South
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It was cool cuz. Jess Keep doin wah chu do. 7/10
Lock-N-Load Entertainment Double L http://www.geocities.com/ukthaunkno...adEntertainment
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07-28-04, 05:39 AM | #12 | ||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 005F B7E2
Rhymes Are My Source Of Force, Come Smooth With Love Quotes Like Dove Soaps, Roll Straight With Scroll Great Fold Hate Like Paper Towels, Vapors Howls Like Coyotes And Roadrunners
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07-28-04, 07:09 AM | #13 | |||
1926
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IP: AFF5 A41D
Wooooooooooooow, My Boy Is Gonna Waste You With Ease...
Have Fun Dumass... |
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07-28-04, 08:28 AM | #14 | ||||
Spiritual Respiration
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IP: 3CF2 7138
ya'll know he fucked up Right. as ya'll know this ya boy Forgotten Flow. I'ma be back wit some shit in amout 30-45 min. Ya career is over. you'd fear my disses when I first came to this site. http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=116379
like Forsaken said dont diss me if you aint better.
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07-28-04, 08:50 AM | #15 | |||||||
Ms. Get Gully
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IP: C1DA C961
Not too shabby ..could have been more lines since this was a diss...if u gonna do a short verse just make sure every single line u put out there is hard hitting ..because with a longer verse you could have had the lines u had and then added the harder hitting ones..some of ya lines was funny and some of em just decent...i dont see anything wrong with structure of ya bars this is text write em how ever u want to write the bars just as long as they fit together right.
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