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05-26-05, 10:26 AM | #16 | |||||
Cus I Jus Ma$fit Dis Shit
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real talk...dis is hotness wrapped in a rap...structure, imagery was on point...really felt every line, and could relate to sum...dis is dopeness at a peak dat i havent even seen from neither of u...and Att, when u get a nice deep topic in mind, PM me, cuz im not dat good thinkin bout topics...we gotz ta collab kid...9/10...real talk
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05-26-05, 03:52 PM | #17 | |||||
in your system
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*rolls in with a wicked beat pounding*
this was awesome, seriously......i read it 3 times over, wordness, seemed like this was a difficult topic to write on, well seeing how you two both came out, ever so subtle explainging your insecurities, but managed to explode with emotion and everything, haha i think i liked your second verse the most atticus, but i read the first one over, and it was still really good, your style is pretty complex, but yet at the same time, works very effectively with how you portray your topics....if that makes sense, word.....emotion was kickin' in this man, great write man, really feeling it word to OSB, little different approach than usual eh, but it worked nicely...good message, nice flow, great emotion, you really hit the nail on this one man, definately write more, nah sayin? big props to both here, this was a killer OM, keep up to both fo-sho
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05-27-05, 04:04 PM | #18 | ||||||
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a yo now i see i jumped o nthe right team here vocab was there and shit deffintly running this this the post of the day right ere young bankz out holla fam stay up continue dropping that fire and ill be ther with chu holla
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05-27-05, 04:31 PM | #19 | ||
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Wow Nice Shit Best open Mic I Seen Since I've Bin Back, Vocabulary Was Good In Here Both Came With Fucking Nice Structure Creative Shit Here, This Should Be A HOF Man Good Shit Yo I Liked The Concept Of This Piece Good Topic
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05-27-05, 05:06 PM | #20 | ||||||
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This piece was good, I liked the topic & I feel you portrayed it well here. Vocabulary seemed on-point. Structure made it hard to follow but it was still good. You both had different approach's which was a good thing. Keep dropping.
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05-27-05, 05:13 PM | #21 | |||||
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i agree, good shit yall......keep that shit up.....structure was iiight...good use of vocab keep that up..yall flow was good on it and i think yall should collab more often. good shit yall
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05-27-05, 06:41 PM | #22 | |
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[[Verse One: Atticus]]
Cold... So Self Aware Nearly Swelled With Null Pain There Remains No Clearly Well, Hell All Fates Fallin Dull. ^I have no idea what this means Full With Great Opportunities Dropped Late Pages Erased Scribbled Blank Classics Seem Lacluster, To Muster Greatness ^kinda fillery but not too bad... Deems Its Placement As This Obsene Dream... Lavish Covers Tucked Under-Over Realities Blacklist At The Back Misunder- Stood Youth Doomed By "Could Do's", Never Dones Continue To Run Through A Life Of Light Blind To Strive With Eyes Fused Up. ^I have no idea what this means As I Search For Comfort... Last Resort To Sore Is Some Form More Or Less More Less Than More Yet The Love Makes This One A Whore. Hunt For The Touch Of Anyone One That Can Form The Sence Of Sudden Abundance... Fuck Me! Free Me From Poor Judgments! this is too much for me...im like on multi overload...and i really dont understand what you mean by any of this...maybe im just stupid or maybe it doesnt make any sense [[Chorus x2]] Inpurity, How Pure They See... Please Let Them See Me Bleed For Acceptance Cuz My Wrists Slit And... I Think I Saw A Smile Seep Against His Lips, "DAMN!"... Quick Razor Rip And Dance To Please My Little Insecurities Rants. [[Verse Two: OneStepBeyond]] My insecurities are endless, life with dozens of twists, Running from myself... and my purity, it doesn't exsist, werd... Attached mentally to my girl in which I struggle to fix, I always fall One Step short, now failures strung in the mix, Can't juggle the shits, so the pressure on my shoulder builds, Yet to have soul instilled... still showing colder shrills, youre reachin for multis with the showing colder shrills but i was feelin these two bars as a whole...i can understand what youre talking about and the feel is pretty cool... Sposed to be a souljah, losing prides giving me colder chills, Bottle up my firing emotions and when the molten builds, One day they explode, flaming, burning, igniting the fuse, fighting the fueds within myself, i'm frightened to choose, real nice right here Wether to change my life, but I descent still to badness, The ability to do so is there... but my will is absent... werd...this capped shit off...really nice stuff here... [[Chorus x2]] Inpurity, How Pure They See... Please Let Them See Me Bleed For Acceptance Cuz My Wrists Slit And... I Think I Saw A Smile Seep Against His Lips, "DAMN!"... Quick Razor Rip And Dance To Please My Little Insecurities Rants. [[Verse Three: Atticus]] Drift Through Days In Haze Of Blur Blue Shades Asume A Tune That Drones Quick In Flash... Come To Play A Few Hours Past... Waste Away The Class My Last Grade A Fail Stale Brained... Maine's Influence Henced That Blaze Of Smoke, Clouds Dround Out The Sounds Of Hope Beyond The Pond Of Poison Possitioned In This Frown Of Rope. The Drugs My Freedom Fiefdom Of Peace Piece Of Mind Just Dug Its Grave-Lay-Pray One Day The Gates Free A Bind. Now The Highs Familiar Still Your Frown Finds Out How To Renounce This Drugs Feel Your Fucked, So You Cut Down To Cut... "OOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!!!!!" pretty nice...i understand this more than the last one but still not totally...you should work on making more verses like this...not just like drifting off into nonsensical flowery language like the first verse... hit up my gfx battle with hattrick... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=192021
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05-27-05, 06:41 PM | #23 | |||||||
ready 4 wuteva
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this shit's moving. it's a very complex, deep type subject. almost like an extended metaphor of life's ups and downs. i really enjoyed reading this. ya'll seem to have great chemistry workin 2getha. this almost shouldn't even be considered rap, it seems more like insightful poetry. i give it 5/5 mics up...rtf......1
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05-27-05, 06:50 PM | #24 | |||||||
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Yo, i'ma tell u like this. I dun usually read long drops from niggas, but yours actually kept my interest. The wordplay in Atticus verses was very good. I've yet 2 seen any good wordplay on this site until i read that. And OSB was mad serious. I felt the punches in that and everything flowed so good. The chourus i didn't get until i read it a few times but an overal good chourus 2. I was really feelin that tho. Good job @ both of you guys. Keep that up, i wish i could read more good drops like that. EZ
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05-27-05, 06:51 PM | #25 | ||||||
Whys That?
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yo this is hott
both a you dropped solid....not one stands out from the other...this is one a thos collabs that without the other person it wouldnt be as dope! So you both worked in with each other well on this structures are good.flow is good..entire drop is a good read... RTF! |
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05-27-05, 07:29 PM | #26 | ||||
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Hey I liked this one it was cool. I didn't understand this line though...
"To Please My Little Insecurities Rants." The Rants.. I dont know what your trying to say.. Now Atticus "Cold... So Self Aware Nearly Swelled With Null Pain There Remains No Clearly Well, Hell All Fates Fallin Dull." Your maltis was good but you need to work way more on your vocab.. I really do like your style and will want to work with you sometime.. My fav line from you was.. "Tucked Under-Over Realities Blacklist At The Back Misunder- Stood Youth Doomed By "Could Do's", Never Dones Continue To Run" Wow word play was sick and made me think about my life. But Im stuck by just doing and don't think. Im hella sparadic. OneStepBehind.. I really got caught into your verse.. I love how you started off.. "My insecurities are endless, life with dozens of twists, Running from myself... and my purity, it doesn't exsist, Attached mentally to my girl in which I struggle to fix, I always fall One Step short, now failures strung in the mix," But as I said you need to work on vocalb, The word play was nice in here I liked how you added your name by an action.. really nice. Honestly structure was dope by both of you.. good colab and worth the read.. to be honest I want to work with both of you... Ah, and if you wanna return the favor just hit up "psst" or "WHAT! ask me why im in TC!" Overall this was like, hmm 7.989/10 (LoL) Sweft
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05-27-05, 10:04 PM | #27 | ||||
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.. I just realized.. this was the best feed back I gave yet on RV.. wow
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05-27-05, 10:17 PM | #28 | ||||
Peace, Love, Unity
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cause this is dope
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05-28-05, 10:53 AM | #30 | ||||
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damn!!! that wuz sum really good shit, I liked the vocab and the multies alot, you got a complex theme but that make me like this shit more, tight rhymes dawg keep it like that
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