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Old 11-10-04, 01:27 PM   #1
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These illusions in my dreams are really full of confusion...
Un-Provin delusions of un-amusin images now un-loosened...
No time to re-joice, and sleep doesn’t seem to be a choice...
Too afraid to hear that voice that seems to never be destroyed...
Boredemness I avoid, but no matter what i’d loose and fall asleep...
In my dreams I’d fall too deep, I cant escape cuz im all too weak...
A never ending whisper, screams with children slowly crawling close....
Blood exposed, sliding out her eyes and nose with no surviving hope...
My legs restricted, not even my small fingers are able to be lifted..
My eyes not allowed to be shut, My life, not allowed to just live it....
I’d think at times the only way for it to disapear is to do suicide...
But every night its crystal clear that there’s no use to undo my life..
So i’ll just have to live with the sufferin and the horrible dreams...
N have people think I lived a happy life, wen that ain’t wut it seems...


From the bottom of the top this piece was hot.....
Very impressive vocabulary and nice wordplay....
This topic you chose about "Horrible Dreams" is something we can relate with....
The only down side is few slow parts were flow just got kind of rugged.....keep it up though.

p.s. Its true people sleep to much......dont even view the post if you dont leave feed back
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Old 11-01-04, 04:23 PM   #2
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uppin this shizzle for nizzle
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Old 11-05-04, 10:36 AM   #3
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Old 11-05-04, 11:18 AM   #4
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that was some nice shit mayne...liked it alot.....pretty deep....9/10
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Old 11-05-04, 11:26 AM   #5
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yo dat was hott man i liked dat keep doin ya thing
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Old 11-05-04, 11:41 AM   #6
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Old 11-08-04, 08:28 PM   #7
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Old 11-09-04, 11:54 PM   #8
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dope shit!!!

your rhyme's in this are nice.had a nice gloomy feeling to it half way thru.
nice drop.
keep them coming.
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Old 11-10-04, 07:07 AM   #9
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9/10 You're better than me as far as thinking goes maybe I would suggest writing about what people want to hear and sometimes opposite be alarming and surprizing. That was good You're a real poet, some peeps on here have no imagination. Most of my shit blows so far but there were a couple good ones anyways im looking to get better so if you can upp my shit thanks alot.
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Old 11-14-04, 02:32 PM   #10
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Old 11-14-04, 04:13 PM   #11
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feelin dis shit dawg...9/10...
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Old 11-14-04, 11:00 PM   #12
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uhhhh thanx????
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Old 11-15-04, 10:46 PM   #13
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Old 11-16-04, 07:13 PM   #14
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Old 11-20-04, 05:02 PM   #15
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