Good lookin on the honest vote Choppa. UPPIN for votes^^^^^^^^^^^^

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itte we need sum good clean votes hurr

upinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn 4 dem votes

uppin in dem votes

punches: caustic
flow causetic
breakdown: caustic u did good but theres room for improvement cuz u could do better
spitfire ur good for a rookie keep practicing
my vote caustic

Thanks street. Uppin on those VOTES^^^^^^^^^ drop a link, I'll hit it up, holla.

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tte hurr comes anotha one 4 tha kidds\\
imma bout to teach Oc6 The Caustic a lesson he will never 4get\\
... yeah.. weak.

lets blaze the field up an tie him up in it\\
yu"ll be burned up worser than ashes matta fact u won't be shyte\\
... yeah... weak. also, poor flow, simple rhyme

im tha king an u peasent of dis rap game\\
i won't stop at nuttin to finish u off,cut chu neck an rip out cha brain\\
not great strucuture, weak but existent punch

im lyrical acclaimed to let tha innocent die\\
u will be my next victum i shread up, stabb u in da heart an tear out cha eyes\\
again, poor structure, overused punch, not much going on here

this isn't offical pain its just why u hurr so enjoy\\
i grabb u will u sleep drag u out side feedchu to my as if u were a chew toy\\
feedch to my... what? dog? even so this is weak

im real violent when i start my method of physical dismantle\\
want a demonstration come hurr bring legg imma gently rib it off by my manhandle\\
yeah... kinda getting repetetive hear, and the lines are too long

im quick to notice a victum of defeat\\
how u ask 1st i grabb u by there hand and chop off there feet\\
the first line was ok, but this went nowhere

then i toss the remains into a selective ponds \\
you won't be found again till a legal statement in court an then sum agreeable bonds\\
second line waaay too long. "selective ponds" .. wtf? your second line was also weak

Overall man, you gotta elevate. Work on some actual punches instead of just "im gonna kill you" shit, work on multis, work on rhymes, work on worldplay, work on structure.

Like this:

"
No one can handle my vocab., It'll have your brains stirred/
And I'll have ya running up and down helpless, just like ya avatar/"

See how its an actual diss, more elevated wordplay and then he uses a personal.

oc6.. you gotta work on your structure too though. not great in this one, and it didn't flow together well. also work a bit on punches, although you were definetely better.

v/caustic

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Thanks Shadow, i'll take this input in, appreciated.

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d/r votes i smell

rofl. i said his was weak, yours was just much weaker. grow a pair man.

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spit fire...hurry up and drop....i dropped first just for you kid

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Yo Wildfire, hit this battle up with a vote and I'll return. Spit, its called honest feedback, watch and learn kid.

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aight caustic i got you.....lemme read this shit...

aight i'm gonna be honest..OC6....you have done much better...but i guess everybody raises the bar when it's required to compete...your verse was enough to win....but i wasnt really feelin the punches that much...onl;y thing you really had that was good was structure..no disrespect...i know for a fact you can do better..so don't even worry about it

spit fire...i'm almost sad to say i can't say the same for you...your verse was weak as fuck...you had no wordplay...no good punchlines..no personals..you didn't have anything...stay up tho....i'm sure you can elevate if you just take a look at what everybody else is doin

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Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate.

"watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox

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