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04-20-04, 01:36 AM
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IP:
Alright, its like this. Denounced, stop typing a bar as one continuous line, it makes it hard to see the rhyme.. just type it as two lines. A line is usually 8-15 syllables, each of yours is like around 25, so just cut it in half, make it easy to read. Other than that, nice verse, you had 4 pretty strong punches, original rhymes, pretty decent vocab.
Demo man.. work on punches, vocab, rhyming, flow and structure. Like I said, a line is like 8-15 sylables, and every two lines should rhyme. just keep that in mind when you writing. V/ Den
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04-20-04, 03:13 AM
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IP:
D Owned you, pure and simple, hair line was witty as fuck.
Punches- D Similes-D Most unwanted bullshit that belongs in a freestyle- Demobx Vote-D |
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04-20-04, 03:22 AM
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IP:
thanks ..thats a ko man..but you gotta vote in the poll.....
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04-20-04, 11:54 AM
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IP:
Got say Denounced took da gold noth verses were good but De had better punchez
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04-20-04, 05:16 PM
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IP:
Can i get like..ONE vote in the poll come on..what does it take to close a battle here..PLEASE PEOPLE VOTE OON THIS!!!!
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im gone for 3 centurys 2 decades and five years... then the name De' appears and queers start sheddin tears... catchin peers,man's sweatin of shear fear... when i interfere,im closer than i may appear like rearview mirrors... |
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04-20-04, 11:01 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP:
yo denounced Spoke to me lol he had some pretty hard punches and multis ur structure needs a lil work
Demobx u dint punch as hard as Denounced but u need to improve on ur punches and Multis cuz they were very bad and ur Structure u need alot of work on the Denounced open: 7/10 close: 8/10 personals: 8/10 metas: 7/10 punches: 9/10 multis: 7/10 win Demobx open: 6/10 close: 7/10 personals: 6/10 metas: 7/10 punches: 5/10 multis: 6/10 Loss as u can see Denounced gets my vote so ko is the way it flow so bye and holla at me mo 1 Denounced :VOTE: |
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