r u peeps dat blind or jus dat lazy 2 read a whole rhyme?...i aint tryin 2 tlk shit but yo re-read my post but read da whole damn thing i kno u can do it it cant take dat much time outta ya busy scedule i rhyme every time wit words in da beginin,middle,n end
pm^from raw killa...


dawg..im not tryna beef,im tryna help.u aint listening,
rhymin words at the begining n middle r multies....
RHYME AT THE END OF UR LINES.....
IM NOT GONNA READ UR WHOLE VERSE COZ ITS THE SAME...
ITS NOT VERY ENTERTAINING TO READ 100 LINES OF WACK STRUCTURE...
FUKIN FIX IT...HOW HARD IS IT TO UNDERSTAND THAT?

UNTILL U DO ITS WACK.SIMPLE AS.

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fuks sake.4th time.....rough/tough.........multi....yes
same goes wit all ur lines.u got multies yes....
NO THERES NOTHIN WRONG WIT MULTIES.THERE GUD.YES

see this........doesnt rhymeas wtf jus HAPPENED,niggaz instagatin dis CAN,opener 2 get da CAN of whoopass CRACKIN,YAPPIN like
faggots n whinnin like bitches so ya must like havin ur ass PACKED IN

see this does.
,niggaz instagatin dis CAN,opener 2 get da CAN of whoopass CRACKIN/
faggots n whinnin like bitches so ya must like havin ur ass PACKED IN

if u dnt get it go away.......ur annoyin me wit ur wackness now.

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show ur style up quicker than an ethiopian chasing a BREAD VAN
only time you seen DELIVERY....is walking past your MILK MAN
already k.o`d ya ass 5-0..,if ur rhymes is aids they still WUDNT-KILL
i capture ya,keep u n kill,hit harder than an x-pill,on CYPRESS-HILL
^^^diss me back.faggot.u cnt n that was weak.lmfao

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how blind r u? u wear contacts or glasses? which is it u aint helpin no 1 makin fun of how they use da english launguage in writin read da shit wit both eyes open i rhyme through da whole fuckin verse i kno how 2 write music been dojn da shit 4 fuckin 5 yrs goin on 6 i write rhyme words in da beginin,middle,n end r u dat blonde? cmon obviously u jeolous of skill or sumtin cuz ive got hataz who hate in me jus cuz im white n say nigga n niggaz in my rhymes then u there plenty peeps i kno who say im dope,tight,nice,etc.. so on n so on y cant u jus admit it i dont suck period n when im ready ima prove it 2 u in our next battle where you'll wish u neva crossed me on a bad day or a good 1 peace othas on thanx 4 da love holla

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000000000.0 out of ten these dickriders sayin its sweet but its not bitch if you dont like what i wrote fuck ya bicth call me out and get merked bitch sq hoe

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wot can i say................u dnt take advice........so continue being wack......
its a shame dawg

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bitch i take advice when it real n not hatin da line u jus wrote structure is jus how mine is in all my shit bitch u da 1 need 2 grow up dont b mad cuz u a fake ass femcee whho neva made it u comin on here desperate seriously battlin every1 n tlkn like u da bitch of da litter hoe u dont kno me so quit fuckin judgin n hatin i listen 2 ur advice i kno i gotta work on structure a bit oth than dat u kno im nice fuckin a

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I'ma have to go ahead n' agree with Manipulation.. Beside it being longer than the fuckin' bible, it wasn't bad.. You've got nice potential, but your structure is horrible.. You may disagree, but the fact is, people find that type of structure extremely boring to read.. I really do reccomend fixin' that up..Also try gettin' a little more complex.. 90% of that flow was incredibly basic.. Toss a few more less played metas in there.. Work on some wordplay.. you'll be droppin flames in no time.. stay up dawg, keep doin' ya thing..

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thank u strype now see manipulation dat is tru advie n feedback not da hatin u keep postin 1 luv nigga peace ill work wit it

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OMG.this was the best i think you have ever did it had so much power, that when ya say it to yourslef you can feel that good ass flow, it rhymes the perfect way and has so much bulit force in it.it inpak me so much.its a little long but its good,and manipulation,you just a sour loser .why say ya ain't hatin when u know deep down inside you want say good job ,keep it up.good stuff raw.

thanx 4 da respect n love angela see manip admit it like i said n been sayin y u hatin i mean its like u like me or sumtin lmmao only few hataz on here at me
u cuz u so full of ur self manip n those cuz i say nigga n niggaz in my lyrics otha than all i been hearin is good shit bout my flow's like when i was postin at www.rapcheck.com sum u peeps straight sleepin on a whitie quick 2 judge cuz my skin color when ya'll dont kno me 4 shit now dat keepin it gangsta

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