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nice drop, u had a lotta emotion in it. good luck wit her.
peace

A great emcee speaks from the heart and translate their emotion through rhyme. I agree w/ these other cats - you veered off a little but the emotion was there and the content was clear. Keep writing from the heart!

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thanx ya'll appriteate all the helpful feed back

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yo Ruff that shit was tite son, man i felt u on dat 1, it was good, u put yo self out there n u described wat u was feelin, but Fuck Virtue he jus tryin to make himslef look hard dawg, but nice drop

thanx emergin you are not that bad peace much luv for ya'll

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yo peep my new collabo wit Raw Killa on open mic, yea keep postin

i did and it was crap naw jus playin it was fya and it gaVE me some inspiration to write wit idyllic queen
peace much luv

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If stuff comes from ya heart, its always nice, great drop...(and good luck boi )

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thanx gal good luck to you too

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c'mon ppl view this song

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view this shit damn

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When i read the first bar...i thought Linkin Park- Crawling!..any one agree..there defiently some lyrics in here that are rather "similar" not saying its been bitting coz he hasnt...but damn when u actually sing these words to crawling u can straight away notice it, anyway...I assume your pretty much in your "learning process" of writing songs..the rhyme scheme is ok but wasnt impressive..opens mics are supposed to be emotional pieces keeping me glued to the screen..unfortunatly this did not!..its always nice to see rappers express these emotion though you have the basic idea.just need to be alot more dercriptive and emotional...seeing as you like idyllic queen so much i suggest you read her pieces..you learn quite alot from her alone..expand your vocab..use some wordplay..i often wright about personal experiences because you have felt that emotion within which fuels the fire and give you inspiration..kinda like what eminem does!...anywayz keep wrighting..peep other pplz drops aswell see how you can improve! i hope you will find my comments useful

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