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View Poll Results: young_buckshot vs grimripper
grimripper 5 71.43%
young_buckshot 2 28.57%
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Old 10-06-04, 11:16 AM   #16
JackOfAllTradez
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From: Cali4nia
IP: E3CA 7CA2

Voted For: grimripper

Emcee:grimripper

Verse:
yo im out here tryin to prove that im a worthy rapper
this guys like a bug getting merked by my bug zapper
this guys wack thinkin he cant beat the grim
the guy doesnt even have a win but wishes he were slim
buckshot spittin his rymes like he's some kinda sharp shooter
the only job he has is delivering papers on his electric skooter
the way i wrap dogg its electrifyin
cuz its my record not ur that the people be buyin
so when i win this battle u remember one thing
that nobody wants to hear about how u got ice and bling bling

Comments:well....first off you need to elevate on alot of areas...im sure you know what i mean...and you need to get some vocab in that head...coz look you used this guy 2wice and almost used it again....work on metas also...

Marks:
Wordplay - 3/10
Metas - 3/10
Vocabulary - 4/10
Structure - 5/10
Punches - 4/10
Opener - 5/10
Closer – 4/10
Personals – 3/10
Enjoyment – 4/10
Creativity - 4/10
Overall - 39/100
---------39%


Emcee:young_buckshot

Verse:
eat it grimm feel my flow,gotta pack of zigs and a bag of dro
you fukkin pussy gonna be a no show
me and my venomspittin gonna blow
a fat load like u a fukkin hoe
i hate when ppl dont have no goal
be like tha rock and know your role
bitch u gotta fukkin clit ring in your lips
walkin around wit your j-lo hips
you fukkin bully your gonna get hit
cause im tha grimm one you aint shit
all i gotta do i touch u and thats it
sit here by tha pool and take a dip
you aint shit mann your fukkin wack
young buck said it best **get off my track**
peace yall thanx

Comments:dogg you need to come harder that...need word play, metas the whole 9 yards...just elevate in all your areas...

Marks:
Wordplay - 2/10
Metas - 3/10
Vocabulary - 3/10
Structure - 3/10
Punches - 4/10
Opener - 4/10
Closer – 3/10
Personals – 310
Enjoyment – 2/10
Creativity - 2/10
Overall - 29/100
----------29%
 
 


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