enjoy'd readin this.i don' c nuthin' wrong wit' it.the mental portrait was the illest tho'
keep em comin'.ur good.

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I'm like CHUCKy dyin' to live in the flesh free of the BATTERY,
ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me
N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there)
EVIL............backwards =............LIVE

this was preety good, 1st verse was better then the 2ed decent word-play and all flow was decent and all the hook wasnt bad preety good try elevating u'r idea on paper like get more creative witht he topic u in try thinking the un-thinkable or something like that, u know what i mean i cant really explain it well but get more open mind'ed and it will come out natrually....

7.2/10


can u drop some feed on my freestyle befor work....

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1700503

thnx for the feed.
i am allway's writing on paper every day. This was just one that i felt needed to be better I have another verse to it but im happy with that verse. these are the first and last verse's. The second verse is what happen's while im passed out.

I just needed feed on these two to fix mistake's.'
So if any1 can tell me what they are not feeling in these then let me no.
thnx for all feed.
pz

That wa dope as hell man, Can't believe thats gettin slept on, you got some powerful words @, and don't let anybody tell you differnet, cos I'll pimp slap them to antarctica.

Nice piece man, bout to go peep your other.

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thnx for the feed distilled

upping for more feed

I didn't mind this one. Keep copying my style and you'll do just fine, jk!!
Not bad tho 7/10 it was good and all it was just missing the element of surprise but i liked your wordplay and your new style is good Keep dropping My shit is getting worse it seems but check out my next drop for uppers

thnx for the feed.

upping for more comment's on how i could make it better.