Well I cant vote for whatever reason, so I'll leave feedback.

Critic-- I feel that you are rhyming sort of text book style. Maybe you need to let your flow go a bit more.. Use some multi syllable and compound syllable rhyming more often.. To try and make your stuff sound more natural as opposed to being forced out. Thats just how I felt. Other than that, try and put meaning behind your lyrics.. Too many people just try and spark emotions with topicals, thats the easy way.. The proper way to make a topical verse good is by giving your opinion on an issue and teaching people something. If you can make people go "wow, thats changed my whole perspective" then you can be garenteed to have their vote.

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Voted For: CriTiC

ok both had good drops nice imagery and showed good pictures both aslos had good strutcure and vocab but while outbreak stuck to a good dope haunted house story critic made it soo much more and that was dope critic basically gets my vote with a better more creative story

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Voted For: ..:Outbreak:..

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I Feel That OutBreak Took This Battle Because of Better Imagery and Overall Story/Plot. I Felt Outbreaks Story More With Vocabulary, Emotion, and Straight Imagery.

Critic Your Verse Didn't Have A Good Ending and Rambled About The Same Thing...Use Distinctiveness and Creativity.

Vote - Outbreak

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Two votes against me from my biggest fams lol anyways
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Voted For: CriTiC

CriTiC
structure was good.. flow was on targe.. imagery was pretty good.. the topic didnt allow for much emotion, but there was still a little.. u went about the topic in a pretty good way.. it wasnt expected to end like it did.. good shit..

Retro
structure is good.. flow is pretty good as well.. imagery was decent, at best.. some of the shit was either unneeded, or just retarded.. once again, the topic didnt allow for much emotion, so blah with that.. u went about the topic in kind of the same way CriTiC did, which was pretty interesting..

Overall
both had a good structure.. neither really had all that much emotion.. both went about the topic in the same way, which i found to be interesting.. CriTiC had the better flow.. Retro's fell off a little in the middle.. CriTic also had better imagery.. so, basing off of that.. CriTiC gets my vote..

VOTE - CRITIC