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i dont like you......
structure was fuckin horrible, your fuckin whacked out little nigga!
nall.....
structure wasnt good, vocab was off the hook, few multies here n there, for a quick peice it had some emotion too, pretty decent stuff, somthin diffrent in O.M, So i aint gon hate on that
7.5/10

leave feed on my boy Intermentals peice, either one of them
peace out

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^ yeah structure is off cause i wrote it on paper in ten minutes

oh, alright
well strucuture i feel is not a BIG FLAW, Its just the way rhymes are prezented, so ya can barely be faulted, but yeah, thoght i'd dropp an opinnon cause i was actually almost enjoying reading it lol

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^ Word... thanks yo. Almost better than not at all.

There really is a god. But sometimes I feel like this too. But really if there wasn't a god we wouldn't be here. And if there wasn't a god and a heaven then why are there souls. And it isn't gods fault that this world is fucked up. Its the people consumed by their thoughts. But they don't get thoe thoughts themselves. The devil is responsible for that. Just read the bible. lol. That could help.......

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wtf? it just gets randomly upped....haha....yeah, like i said earlier, seeemed like you didn't stay on topic all way through, didn't finish thoughts fully, but this was good for workin it up randomly....just work on structure and consistency..........and

word

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Damn...this aint that good hahaha, pretty wack...I'll post some new shit soon...

heh oh RTF.....

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no.............

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