Voted For: MaRVJay1009

MARV JAY

u mad cuzz i speak fire,u not gon have a "good year" fam "RE-tire"..
dont PRE-voke me cuzz you wont PRE-veal u PRE-school PRE-writer..
^^THIS WAS A BIT FORCED..NOT FEELIN IT.
my slugz remove spines,so who got ya back when 2 nine's hitt'n ya..
you sickest? huh? no if u was u would cum up wit "new lines","cinema"
^^DECENT WORDPLAY...OK PUNCH
dis lame is hype,fam u aint neva flame da mic..me i remain just nice.
kids from "PENnslyvania" but he couldn't "Write" a hot bar da save his life.
^^DNT GET THE WORDPLAY HERE?.
couple sick guy's on rv...marvjay home's da latest dis hoe's da fakest
i dont think u ill..its like u "live on top of RESTRiCTED" cuzz "OVER-RaTED"
^^YEH..THIS WAS AIIGHT..I GET IT
we all know u KORDOZaR..cinema is not a disquise,i'll pop at ya eyes
he "survived a fire" now he goin around think he da "hottest alive"
^^..BEST BAR SO FAR..GUD WORDPLAY
u had verse read 4 me..on aim cryin fam i dont need da bitchin
got punches 4 days only time i'll be "OUT OF Bars" is "leavin prison"
^^AGAIN GUD WORDPLAY...OK PUNCH

CINEMA

girlz a freak seen my family tree swalled me/my grand-son
no heat,beat ya meat cock back only time u bust hand-guns
^^DOESNT MAKE SENSE AT ALL
when i blast you & ya clic the past is where imma leave yall-bodies
he play hard won't get da big picture till he get a autop-sy
^^?????EH...
don't mean great adventures when i say this nigga rep six-flags
Maury loves him came to da show lookin for 1 out of his six-dads
^^^HA.HA...THIS MADE ME LAUGH..IN A BAD WAY.
you a fiene prick neva seen shit the toast'll leave you & ya team-split
how you expectin niggas to back you up when you live on a Queenz-Bridge
^^WAS THIS GUD?..I DNT GET IT
the pumps started a chump hardly when they dumping he darted
make you think backwards so when im finished leave gump in the forest
^^^OK IDEA..DIN REALLY WORK
fuck a cookie i"Roll-Up"put you in the"Oven"then"Bake-Him"
see how much of a pussy he is when the 8'z make this nigga strip naked
^^GAY & WACK..

OVERALL MARV..U had an ok verse noin great, but you were consistent with the wordplay & punches, structure was tight it all flowed ok, a fairly straightforward win.

CINEMA.well i din spot no punches here, u tried a lot of wordplay which didnt come off, most of ya bars ya set up line was beta than the actuall punch, ya struc wasnt too bad, flow decent too, but u really need to work on them punches, and rappin about gay or mum/dad,guns..is played to fuck and looks real wack.dnt do it

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