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04-24-05, 01:59 PM
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Odi et Amo
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Elementality: enjoyed reading your piece because you have a nice writing style in my opinion. I like how you portrayed the sun in those different scenes and how you let the story progress. Your vocabulary was at a high level and it gave something extra to your poem, the imagery was excellent due to your word choice. The emotion was nice as well, how you portrayed the sun as a being and how it made the person feel. I read it a few times to fully grasp everything you were saying, very nice poem!
Hells Fire: I enjoy how you set up this poem with the 2 similar structured lines all the time, the imagery was great. I could really picture everything inside my mind and your emotion was strong, it portrayed the almighty sun versus the mortal human being and such, I really love your approach. The vocab was very good as well, I was scared that those similar lines would get repetitive after a while but that didn't happen, I was focussed throughout the whole thing. You really managed to bring out the concept of the cold so well, excellent piece! Close battle and it's very hard to decide on this on but in the end my vote goes to Hells Fire, no hate whatsoever to Elementality because I enjoyed both drops! I just like the creative approach and emotion in Hells Fire's piece a bit more... DQ
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04-24-05, 08:52 PM
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Light Weight
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vote/Elemntality
Both were decent drops...but I felt the way Element took the topic more, it just seemed to grasp me. I had to read Hellfire's a couple times cause I kinda just lost a little interest towards the end..but after reading again it was good. Hell's flowed alot smoother, due to the more even lines and the bit of rhyme scheme he had. But in a poem I look for thought, detail etc. and Element took it there. |
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04-25-05, 03:15 AM
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hellfire wins............................................
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04-23-05, 01:32 AM
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Life is a Constant Battle
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Cold Sun
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Cold Sun Icy inferno where frost bites the burn
icy inferno where lost fights to learn i watched the sun get a full eclipse i temped the 101 celcius fall to six photosynthesis stoped cuz the sun was cold meta morphasis stoped cuz the son was bold hell froze over with a snow balls chance devil blaze over with a skate halls dance the shadow has encompased the world in death the meadow has decomposed the last self health men learned to see in a shaded wit men learned to be in a saded width i couldnt find the heat of passion i couldnt find the leak of staminon where the sun was cold we couldnt see to this where the son was bold we couldnt see weakness the cold sun where heaven stands still as hell has one the cold sun where heaven hands kill to that last one the sons arms couldnt pull it back to the sky with ones harms distalent null back to die before the nova where live rebirths the phoenix before the lava where allive births the crusifix cold fire how do you burn the hottest cold fire how do you burn the brightest when coldness hits the sun blue fire engulfs all to one when coldness hits the sun blue fire infernos all to none cold shadow of the sun we never knew cold shadow of the sun we never grew cold sun where gods lay and lives of candles flicker cold sun where minds lay blow my candles wicker best as i could do in a few minutes
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