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04-21-05, 05:11 PM
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Ha this was a nice OM'
you had nice structure , pretty decent wordplay, I think you could have elevated alittle bit more on feeling and emotions.. You had nice imagery, that closer was fiya cus nice, overall this was a good peice , havent seen anything from you so this waxs a good first drop, hope you continue dropping nice OM's like this , and making my job worth time nice drop, .. hope to see more
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04-21-05, 05:32 PM
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thanx fam. yea and this is piece is kinda old.. i'm not sure how i'm supposed to elevate emotions on a text open mic. but aiight... check out my poetry one is pinned up in the poetry forum
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