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07-26-05, 04:05 PM

Sam Dope

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-The Life Long Struggle-

We flex on the surface, but deep down we stuggle
Insecurity screams out, but the sounds are muffled
Id like ta say that aint me, but thats stupid because...
I was a hustler before I even knew what that was
Felt I had to prove myself, show that I was legit
But couldnt do it; thats why I started rhymin this shit
I worked hard to elevate, earned some respect and trust
But learned quickly that the sickest verse is never sick enough
So I switched up my perspective, now I spit for myself
Regardless if my CD aint move off the shelf
But now some kats be trippin', askin' "Why do you do this?"
-But if ya cant be true to yaself, who can you be true with?
I see them lie and steal, so they can feel they tough
Then judge others for doin' the same shit they guilty of
It crushes me, how people will kill for an identity
Unaware that deception is their only real enemy
They've been told their whole life their existance is worthless
So they cant see that ignorance is all that blocks their soul's purpose
So go out and find the real truth, and speak up for your reason
Cuz if you dont stand for your beliefs, do you really believe 'em?

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07-26-05, 05:17 PM

Dervla

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we drop today........................................

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07-26-05, 08:13 PM

Dervla

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When She came out of the womb, she was doom.
Mother smile size of a moon, at the same time sad blooms
This Little Girl enters a world of life god have given
with Eyes Woken. She’s Placed where love is not mention
Bad Decension By god, will she ever appease him?
Her Light seems dim. Heart trying staying alive is slim
As She Blend with the curtains, her pupil Now View
A man that love from him is Dew. A heart that's a flu
She Tried everything, including scream but it don’t help
Ache her heart felt. Now She's going to end him
.................................................. .................With a big Yelp

Pain on her back-side. Smells of scotch in her nostrils
She can see the hate in his pupil. In fear her body wobbles
Ever since she was born, without her big mother angel
She've been strangled. A web she can't escape so tangled
Locked in the abyss with him, where scars are being created
Love here is faided.Here where blood on her skin is always painted
When the Scotch cleared. His pupil un-blurred, he still don’t forgive
Acts like his lover died because of her, The day that god alms give
As she cried in her room, while the mattress soaked up her tears.
She cracked the shell of fear, with a expression of a payback
.................................................. ..........Through..all these hurted years

Still Standing blend with the curtains, she Holds the R.I.P
To end all this and she'll be free, with bloods scattered thee
Pays no remorse for his soul, for thou he's going to hell
Loud As a Bell, as her body shook. Blood leaked as he fell
The Lock has been broke, she's free. Breathing no despair
All Pure Air. No Longer fears crept in her, nor deaths to beware
Through all the Long struggles, while she'd walked on long miles
Finally in a long time she's smiles, No more walking in isles
She can now expand herself along the roads. It was a hard struggle
But she end it with a pop of a bubble. Bright sun above her
...............Shimmering down on her....Ahh her mother sent a signal

07-26-05, 08:22 PM

B. Magik

Sam Dope

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From: STL

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Nice drop here.....................................

Uppin for some votes maybe??

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07-26-05, 11:44 PM

Triple_N

Ya mom massages my nuts

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Voted For: Tweety

Good battle by both...Tweet.....strong imagery...you vividly desecribed every facot...some imagery was somewhat forced tho....structure was good coulda been stronger.....vocab was ok....not as spectacualr as it SHOULDA been....flow was koo....the story developed nicely....woulda liked to ahve seen sum metas but eh good anyways overall

BM......man you opened nicely then started falling off...you didn't let the story develop the way it coulda..if u ahd wrote more an kept wit the story better u coulda had it...ya vocab was koo..flow fair..structure wasn't too great neither...imagery faded in an out....u had it in spots...but there was alot of inconsistencies.....overall ya piece jus didn't have enough lines too fully develop an it cost you the match

Vote: Tweet

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07-26-05, 11:47 PM

Valor

A Reflection Of The Past

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Voted For: Tweety

Tweety
nice verse the begiining started off slow but you started to work into the imagery alittle and put out a vision of what was happening,the emotion was nice i was feeling every inch of it,thhe vocabulary was decent in this as well.....nice read girl

BM
you had a great start to your topical,but then towards the end you started to fall off a bit i mean it wasnt a solid piece,your imagery was decent as the same was your emotion,if you never fell of at the end id say the outcome of this battle might of been a different story....anyways keep working at it

v/tweety

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07-27-05, 08:24 AM

Dervla

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Uppin............................................. .

07-27-05, 08:39 AM

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Voted For: Tweety

ok this was an aight topical abttle both did their thing but i liked tweety's more it very outshined BM......though BM did his but i think it wasnt that imagery to show a picture of what ur seein u kno......but tweety on the other hand had alot pf imagery and vocabulary very good job on that and emotion was good for both of yall also tweety outshined that too.......so actually tweety got this but good job to the both of yall but my v/ goes to tweety for havin a better emotional and imagery piece.......
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07-27-05, 02:52 PM

Dervla

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Thanx Bump this up.....................................

07-27-05, 05:37 PM

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.Barz Of Steel.

Don't Even Think About It

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This was feedback posted for BLACK~MAGIK

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07-28-05, 07:09 AM

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Voted For: Tweety

good battle here....

black magik: i liked how u flipped the concept about things in real life and shit like tgat, emotion was good, vocab was decent... flow was on point all the wayu through... they enjoyment was nice basically itket me interested all the way through and had a decent story line to it... good job man

tweety: nice again, different kind of concept here, you went deeper into your piece and had a better story to it,. the vocab was better aswell... flow was on point..... imagaination was better than blacks.... overall i just thought that your piece stood out more and was better to read.

good job to both but imma give this to tweety becuz she went deeper into the topic, and showed more emotion and imagination...

v/ tweety

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07-28-05, 12:51 PM

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B. Magik

Sam Dope

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Fuck you Tweety

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07-28-05, 12:53 PM

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Dervla

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Sorry, only females

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07-28-05, 09:55 PM

#14

Dervla

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Uppin............................................. .....

07-29-05, 11:25 AM

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Dervla

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