and lmmfao @ how fast the votes got "explained" after i was about to have the shit removed......... but ups to any explanation over none.........

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Voted For: Mystic Chaos

Mystic Chaos - Good spit man. You had good rhymes, and told a good story.

Best Line - Was free ballin my life, livin life day by day yo
Now im in this shit KNEE DEEP for sellin that yayo - Word.

Worst Line - NONE

Chip - Yours was decent, but you did do as many lines, and your rhymes wernt as thought out.

Best Line - knee deep in our own self-hate and self-pity,
contradictin ourselves and our morals cuz times iz shitty

Worst Line - wonderin will freedom really ring, we lost track of the bell,
it's crackin' itself, this hope iz merely crack in itself

OVERALL - Mystic takes this easily. He had more lines, better rhymes and told a good story. Chip your spit was to plain. You should use more lines and more thought.

Vote - MC

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thanks yo...thats a rap...3-0 tko.........................

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good battle MC......... wish i coulda got more to help me elevate further tho............

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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..."
-Konchance

my poetry:
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Voted For: Mystic Chaos

Aiight Not Much To Really Break Down Here...

But Ya, Myst Definately Took This.

It Wasnt Even About Him Having A Better Verse Either,
He Just Took Advantage Of The Allotted Lines While Chip Didnt At All.

NIETHER Of You Had A Good Storyline At All Though.
I Mean, Chip Had No Storyline Once So Every.

And Myst Your Was Just Kind Of 'eh'.

But Chip, Never Come Short Like That Again.
The Way You Were Heading, Even Without The Storyline You Woulda Won.

Cuz I Loved The Way You Placed Things Together.
You Had More Of A Poetic Style That I Woulda Voted For Had You Used Like... 20-30 Lines.

So Ya, Thats It.

Please Return The Favor In Me And Sick.I.Am's Battle.

Why mother fuckers got to blacklist me for????????

Voted For: chip

Chip-Well...a short,but nice peice nevertheless.Followed the topic well.Was one of those "topic right in our faces" ones...which is ok to do.I thought your flow was one of the best things ya had going.Stayed consistant throughout the whole thing.My opinion...ya should have made it longer...ya know...make it more desciptive 'n watnot so it'll stick to our heads.But then again...you didn't have any filler or nothing.Every line seemed to have relevance to the topic 'n shit.Props.Ur shit was original,and had more of a "song" feel to it as opposed to a "textie topical"..which is rare..so good job on that..But that part about tarzan 'n jungle wasn't good IMO.I wuzn't feeling that part.

Mystic Chaos-Well...first off,ur peice was too cliche...the "tradegy" thing in topicals is quickly getting boring as we all see it coming.As soon as the read the line about "warrant for my arrest"....I automatically knew you had a tradegy peice right there.Make ur shit more creative.And also....I don't see what relevance the part about his childhood had on the story as a whole.So I guess that was filler.As opposed to Chip..your shit had a more "textie topical" feel to it as opposed to a "song" feel...if ya know what I mean?And filler is a no-no. Best thing you had,like Chip,was flow...ur flow has obviously improved a lot.Keep it up.

Vote-Chip

LIKE IT OR NOT....THAT IS MY HONEST OPINION....DON'T GET MAD...BE GRATEFUL I GAVE THAT MUCH FEEDBACK

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alright, thanks for the honest feed........................

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