good verse bro. I like ya style

Hope the votes come in for you now

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thanx Tie-D, you my boi yo. uppin this................

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Voted For: one mic

One Mic:
its obvious to see, im killin you, watch me bomb this
you and and your wackness will always produce conflict
iight punch - 4/10
like house of pain i get the crowd jumpin
the only thing you bringin in rap is shame to brooklyn
Not Good - 2/10
im spittin raw, cant get a real girl, so you lickin whores
conflicts like a bad restaurant, cuz there aint no point in givin more*
Meh - 3/10
like destiny's child, man, your outta breath
its obvious to see your avatar symbolises lyrical death
Played - 2/10
11/50

You had a good opener, and the flow was decent.


~Conflict~:
How u got me battlin a kid from UK/
Ima smash’em,trashem take his last mic away/
ok punches - 3/10
Dis kid don’t know wat he doin that he fukin wit Brooklyn/
“Go Home Bitch ” cause that’s the only trip ull be bookin/
iight - 5/10
he thinks he could beat something that fukin I created/
they count his mic as “deadly” so bad to be confiscated/
ok - 4/10
Ima leave this kid finished with his corpse diminished/
This dog is sick ima put him to sleep like vetinarian clinics/
ok punch - 5/10
17/50

You had a good flow, and some punches that hit hard.

Vote - Conflict

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation.

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Havnt lost a real battle yet!

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Voted For: one mic

How u got me battlin a kid from UK/
Ima smash’em,trashem take his last mic away/
^^^weak opener
Dis kid don’t know wat he doin that he fukin wit Brooklyn/
“Go Home Bitch ” cause that’s the only trip ull be bookin/
^^^NO punch
he thinks he could beat something that fukin I created/
they count his mic as “deadly” so bad to be confiscated/
^^^Weak
Ima leave this kid finished with his corpse diminished/
This dog is sick ima put him to sleep like vetinarian clinics/
^^^Ight closer

its obvious to see, im killin you, watch me bomb this
you and and your wackness will always produce conflict
^^^ight opener
like house of pain i get the crowd jumpin
the only thing you bringin in rap is shame to brooklyn
^^^Ok....not worded right
im spittin raw, cant get a real girl, so you lickin whores
conflicts like a bad restaurant, cuz there aint no point in givin more*
^^^good
like destiny's child, man, your outta breath
its obvious to see your avatar symbolises lyrical death
^^^Ight closer

V/one mic this was a onesided battle con u came wit a weak verse no real punchs or wordplay also no good personals.....one u came wit a good solid verse that was consistent u get my vote.....
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=215277
^^^RTF Honestly....OR THis Vote will be removed

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Voted For: one mic

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one mic -

its obvious to see, im killin you, watch me bomb this
you and and your wackness will always produce conflict
- Not hard by any means, but ok
like house of pain i get the crowd jumpin
the only thing you bringin in rap is shame to brooklyn
- Personal and ok
im spittin raw, cant get a real girl, so you lickin whores
conflicts like a bad restaurant, cuz there aint no point in givin more*
- Not workin
like destiny's child, man, your outta breath
its obvious to see your avatar symbolises lyrical death
- This is ok for a finisher

Your verse flowed well throughout, rhyming was fine with use of multis at times...you had lines that were ok for a battle, but limitied creativity....

~Conflict~

How u got me battlin a kid from UK/
Ima smash’em,trashem take his last mic away/
- Big no...
Dis kid don’t know wat he doin that he fukin wit Brooklyn/
“Go Home Bitch ” cause that’s the only trip ull be bookin/
- No
he thinks he could beat something that fukin I created/
they count his mic as “deadly” so bad to be confiscated/
- Not really, why 'deadly'? Your backfiring....
Ima leave this kid finished with his corpse diminished/
This dog is sick ima put him to sleep like vetinarian clinics/
- So sweet that you want to put him to sleep...is he 'sick'? this backfired big time...plus the word you were looking for was veterinarian....

Your verse was all over the place lyrically...no line would be considered ok, and some of your lines were shooting bullets back at you....you need to improve on making your lines witty and really attacking the opponent....read your lines like they are someone else's and rate them, try something else if one of them doesn't work...you sound new, so read verses of others that are better and keep tryin...


Ok this battle was comfortably won by one mic....better lines, attacking the opponent more...Stay Up Both

This is my battle:
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=216087

thanx for the vote man, appreciate it. uppin for more votes........

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