Kinda short but it was good, i think that emmotion in this one was through the roof

Ill Technique- Good Imagery, and very decent wordplay for you man

NaRc-UzI- Really good flow and i really liked the immagery man. Loved the vocab too man

Mystic- Vocab was decent, so was flow, i really enjoyed the imagery in this drop u did man.

Chymera - Decent drop. Really liked the metaphors in this one adn words used give a very good feel of images (if that makes any sence)

Mentalz- REally good verse. Like the structure, and vocab, along wit the flow it creates.

I think that this was a very good drop by all of you guys, its a great thing to see a big collab, i jsut think that if it was just two people ud have more space for more detailed verses and it would be even hotter, but still.

Could Yall return the favor on my drop in my sig?

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lyrics blew me away on this...defitnly good job at lyrics
the topic was ight felt alot of it....i like the knife part on the 2nd dudes verse...the structure is in good condition.. and the flow is dope doesnt go off at all.....overall i'd give this a 7.5/10

Uppin' the Crew Collab. Will RTF.

Appreciate the feedback.

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i will rtf drop a link to anything

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Uppin' for some more feed. Appreciate it and will RTF.

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good job...i really liked this

Atticus was really good..short ,simple, andgood

my fav. has 2 b Ill Technique

one bad thing,, y'all sacrificed flow for content alot..sum places didn't rhyme much

fedd back on my poetry piece

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The Pendulum Swing


Atticus
Its...nothing, all my fucking emotions fall dry,
eyes lit of fires sit expired to a broken cry.
Living this drift of a life, just, kissing a knife,
slit by depression...blades lips ripping a site.
Everyday consistence dancing an instant away...
wasting in sorrow, hallow...nothing more than plain.
Back and forth teeters the sands last whim,
while the hourglass blackens as the pendulum swings.

homie ya verse was nice in every way jus i suggest u at least next keep everything rhyming..cuz yo las 2 lines dont rhyme...otha tahn dat good verse.

Ill Technique
I'm Held Down Brutaly To Truthfully Meet Gravity
As My Life Is Manifested Into A Gruesom Reality
Placing My Vision Through The Eyes Of A Barrel
For I Cock It Back And Watch The Hollow Tip Settle
And My Last Seconds Set In While I'm Wreckin
Testin My Medication For Hell's Inn, Were I'm Headin
You'd Be As Mad As Me, If You Had The Key
To Open Doors To Have A Life Half As Bad As Me
Cuase I'm With Satan Contemplatin' This Day
And The Other Line Rings, It's God on Two Way
So I'll Make Sure You Hear Me Now As Life Rings
Bring A Sudden Death As The Pendilum Swings

you homie had every thing on point...vocab,flow,structure,u even made sure every line rhmyed wit anotha line good job kool verse peace.

NaRc-UzI
Supplying vivid emotions with every message in my arsenal
Precious moments are rienforced By the almighty powerfull
Darkness overlaps the sunshine from portraying its beauty
Harvest changing while obtaing my gem Like a saphire ruby
Heartless ideas are swayed by The swinging of the pendulum
Artist hypnotized by The brightness of the magnified spectrum
Mezmorised by the polygons that are falling on my conscience
Realized the controlling of life is the cause of all my problems
I feel free like cactus but the changes of life defies my status
Dying alone cause no one could roam through my apparatus
Percived as harmless the way reality keeps my mind hidden
The pendulum swing scrapes a bit of hope wich is forbidden
The Movement swaying straight foward and back it relates
Rythem Vibrates But Change is what it really demonstrates

same thing as the other good verse peace.

Mystic Chaos
Conciously unaware what beholds at my very presence of Commotion
Motion to Notion, swinging with pride, & yet with vengence belaying
Rappidly swaying, Illusively, back and forth like hung cot's..
Time's not a factor, although the movement staggers at each notch.
The speed stops, slowly haulting after day breaks and the moon rises
With new surprises vastly improving on speed just what is needs
It arises to please the company of every living human being
Cant be seeing, now having temtations to quicken the pace
To push the Pendelum faster, the time is against life in the race
Times a disgrace slowly loosing speed and falling off of the face
Of the maps trace, connecting all dots but still the pendelum continues to sway.

same thing again good verse peace.

Chymera
Please...sway away. A majesty aged
under the thunders of tragedies blame.
Wide eyes sustain blunderless paces
left to right, then the shutterless cave in.
Eye lids link together to kiss in a wink's
tether... Letters to the mind find the ink
to edit. Gentle hymns settle just then sing
before, cut short by a pendulums swing.
The wrecking ball falls, its lust dissecting
the wings of all freely seen bisecting
the hours by excepting. Flowers now
wither in there prime, towers down...
The hourglass has now bowed over.
Over and over the past rounds closer.
The last long sands stand to form God;
as his fists twist and become the world's clock.



Mentalz
..Make note the illusive fluid, as it ripples the canvas stanza..
The tangant phantom grandfather's Tic' inriched bananza
..Include the lucid movement, as it performs to the chords..
Of a life torn in judgement, from the peak down to the shores
It wreaks from pores, engrossed readily.. steadily swaying
As The Pendulum Swings heavily across the aging painting
Staged the blaming, to denounce the compound rash tactics
So I'm constantly placing aim at the surrounding clash of fanatics
To bad it's static, only to my eyes can I see the rue movement
Shrewd and prudent, as I inquire higher and choose to prove it
To loose the trueness, my soul subconsciencly adheres the course
As remourse is here to hear resort to something more heavenly
So brevity heads my leveling, stops to contort a life in shambles
Until one by one the candles, remain unlit as they sit in waiting
..Ever changing like my lifes decisions .. forever rearanging..

man fuck it good drop every1 everything on point peace.

figured since i jus used ya'll thread 2 post a reply 2 will appear i might as welll post sum feedback on the song

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Thanks bro, appreciate it

But they always save the best for last... and you never read mine. ;-)

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Wow, Lol I Didn't Even Think This Was Going To Reach Post. Good Job Everyone, Way To Rep C.S.

thanks for the feedback......................

uppin this...........................one last time!

atticus - dope and vivid as usual, a well concealed and expressed view...short but sweet

Its...nothing, all my fucking emotions fall dry,
eyes lit of fires sit expired to a broken cry.

tech - not bad, not too consistent i thought, and some lines seemed awry for your choice in direction...but none-the-less, it was clear and visual, and a nice addition to this compilation

You'd Be As Mad As Me, If You Had The Key
To Open Doors To Have A Life Half As Bad As Me

narc-uzi - meh, wasn't really feeling yours, only because of your structure...i think you tried waaay to hard to make it perfect, and presentable....really strained some of your lines/rhymes....but not bad, i think if you concentrated more on just writing, if would have been better, keep up

Mezmorised by the polygons that are falling on my conscience
Realized the controlling of life is the cause of all my problems

mystic chaos - i really think you tried to hard to rhyme everything, and actually took away from your piece, because i liked your direction, and the ideas you had.....and your rhyme scheme was fucked, sorry, but this was pretty messy...but overall, i liked what you were saying, just make it a little more concise

Rappidly swaying, Illusively, back and forth like hung cot's..
Time's not a factor, although the movement staggers at each notch

chymera - seriously, i think the best part of this collab...everything was short, yet perfectly established the view, direction and emotion you were expressing, awesome...i can't pick a favourite bar, because i liked the whole thing, well done

mentalz - liked this, it was good, some neat lines, creative, and smart, good multies, and nice closer, keep up

It wreaks from pores, engrossed readily.. steadily swaying
As The Pendulum Swings heavily across the aging painting

keep up to all, nice work

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