once more on my terms ya know?

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yeah thsi was some real good shit.. props to the both of ya... TR is always real good in his collabs

mann this peice was hot!

The chorus was dope, it had nice flow and it was dope allthrough, Both verses were strong,

Hit mine up please,

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Whats the point of living?

The voices in my head Feat. Rule

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More Comming soon!

Good piece here. I don't know quite how to describe it.. but in all 3 verses the flow paused for a moment after a line. Lemme show:

ST's 1st:

From the first start, this isn't what i've chosen//
Fighting my life frozen, not to move when i'm provoken//
Its like lifes part of the mic chokin' like the cords wrapped in token//
To take my thoughts my minds broken//
^^^ After the third line, you should came with a line that rhymed with Cause then hit it off from there. Work on the flow and word usage.

Realist's Verse:

New to this, he made fun of my lunchbox man
How many little kids you know own a grand
Reprimand then made it all seem like a plan
^^^ Once again, after the 2nd line, maybe you shoulda N ended with a word that rhymed with knives. Your Flow was good in your verse tho, props for that.

ST's 2nd:

Its not my case to bitch, neither is it yours//
But i'm not here to tell a story, so don't tell me yours//
My lifes like the itches without cures//
^^^ Same explaination. Cancel the 3rd line N start with the rhyming word for the following 3 lines.

OVERALL: Flow was good, could be worked on a lil bit. Imagery was great from Realist, ST, you could use some work on that and your internals. Vocab was decent, up it a little. Good read tho, Keep Droppin.

-Formula.

**I'ma have a new drop up soon.. look out for it and drop a reply.. either one of ya'll/both... Much appreciation**

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poetic, but not that original... some lines seemed used up, some rhymes were predictable.

good quality as far as talent, but hone your skillz and focus.

peace