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Old 10-16-05, 06:32 PM   #1
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Listenin...

Beat is coo...I can hear hiss and pops and shit in the beginning...voice is okay...Verse kicks in...I only have time to listen to the frist verse, but anyway...flow is decent, not choppy, just needs a little bit of work...quality is lacking, but yeah...lyrics are coo...but the biggest problem is you delivery and emotion. It sounds like your whispering into that shit. Don't whisper...yell haha.

Word, keep it up man.
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Old 10-16-05, 06:37 PM   #2
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ite,

appreciate it mate.
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Old 10-17-05, 07:14 AM   #3
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lol been waitin for thsi for time....


ite beat is too slow... you need a hyped beat kinda for disses and put more emotion into it... flow was ite slipped a few times yuor punches eere decent its a known fact dat asains have small dicks rofl...

get on msn soon as u get ome from skwl n we'll talk bout a collab

gfodo track man keep it up
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Old 10-17-05, 11:42 AM   #4
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safe mate,

ima jump on msn now.
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Old 10-18-05, 02:52 PM   #6
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LMFAO yo kin folk i got this beat 2!
im listening
CHEA yo mayne ya ACCENT dont match ya TEXT lMAO
or ya features!

lyriks koo,i could barely hear whatcha sayin but hey for first sounding good so far,chea lyriks is koo,hatred'z there,flow on point could have made it a lil more longer but hey koo,quality is good!shyt yo koo drop!

Dope Drop just like dont spit as close inda mic feelme homie!

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Old 10-18-05, 04:22 PM   #7
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i love this beat...

i dun have a clue to anything you said except Umpa Loompa, Fuck, Murder, and Prick

Your voice is very immature, meaning that your voice is light making you sound very young and the way you rap making you sound lighter than your voice is normally.. (guessin, from how it sounds)... The thing bout your voice tho, is it's unique.. you just have to find a way to make it sound serious no one's gonna believe what you say unless you 1) be confident 2) sound serious 3) give them something they don't expect you to say. That's the advantage of your voice being unique you have to work your way into all 3 of those..

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I have one of the lightest voices in the world if you ever heard me in a yahoo chat you'd know, but when I spit I can make it sound harsh and keep it unique without takin the feminine side out my voice or adding bass to my voice wit any edittin programs...

ya flow was eh, seems like you been freestylin for not so long, I really don't think beat compliments your voice one bit... You using so much energy in this, but it's not helpful, you tryna sound harsh wit your but now your clarity is fuckin up... And i kno it's not just your accent, because I understand quite a few UK heads on the site... but work at it and keep workin at it. I'm lookin forwards to seein you improve,
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Old 10-18-05, 05:47 PM   #8
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Thanks a lot for good feed,

il defo try that stuff in my next one...
...ima fuck around with the vocals too.
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Old 10-21-05, 12:44 PM   #9
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Well it's a personal opinion, I prefer more hyped up beats when dissing someone...gets me more into the song...
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Old 10-21-05, 12:58 PM   #10
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Thanks fgor the feedback, all appreciated ye.
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