yo dawg nyce shit. 1 ov da best verses i hav seen on Open Mic. I'll give it a 5/5

aight Peace (v)

This was a great peice....Ill wordlplay..ill multies....and the best bit was the flow......The flow stayed constant throughout the peice and it was a dope peice....great vocab the whole shit was dope....

9.99999999999999999999999999999999999999999999/10

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^ thanks guys, you dont know how it feels to have ur work appreciated like this... thanks for all the comments...

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damn at the longness....u wasnt' shitting lol....

nice piece though...not just cuz it's a deep piece...I mean I see those all the time and write them all the time, and I know a lot of kats will blow smoke up ur ass if they read a deep topic they feel bad if they say it's wack....I'm not one of those people...

but seriously this was dope...I actually read the whole thing (which I wasn't planning on doing) u expressed the shit in a really poetic and metaphoric way....u had nice vocabulary and rhymes were pretty nice too...flow was on point..my only problem is that you were a little too vague at some parts and it was hard to feel the true purpose of the piece...since it was u letting ur heart out it seemed like u was keeping the real problems out of the reader's view....which is good to a certain extent...

overall this was good though...please don't take offense to any of my crit/advice cuz all I'm tryna do is give honest feelings instead of bullshit ones that won't help u....

peace

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^ no way would i take offence.... as i said "all feedback is appreciated" and it makes me feel good that ppl like my stuff... so thanks.... and on the topic of the vagueness... when/if i get some audio equipment, im going to record a short mixtape/album... and this will be the first track... so its kinda an intro to myself... the other songs will reveal more of me and my personality... thanks for all the feedback

^ yea I was gonna say u should record it but I didn't think u had audio capability....well if u ever do get it recorded and u can get it online or something PM me n let me hear it...

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NICE PIECE I ENJOYED READIN IT KEEP AT IT DAWG 1

I enjoyed this piece thoroughly
Your strength is the passion and the truth behind the words
Your weakness is that it was text, I'd love to hear that shit audio
All in all it was a great piece, Thumbs up for the first open mic!

thanks........ all the feedback is appreciated................ keep it coming...........