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Old 09-12-04, 05:14 PM   #31
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Old 09-12-04, 05:17 PM   #32
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this was a dope..read...pretty long ...but it was worth it....structure was on point...multies were decent ...wordplay..was on the money....feelings and emotions..were really..good and so was the feelings going into the drop..overall very good drop.... 8.5/10
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Old 09-14-04, 06:47 PM   #33
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Old 09-21-04, 08:03 PM   #34
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that was dope man i liked yer verse and fer a 1st ever it was dope man and i mean it its got complex words. but i tryed showing my freinds this song there wit me now and they say it sucks but i told them they dont understand rap then and there like no we do hes wack thats what they said but me i say yer abotu in this songs a 9/10 maybe a lil more but not 10 thats hard to get but ya chekc my piece thanks
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Old 09-21-04, 10:10 PM   #35
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this shit was long but nice flow good wordplay creativeness was above average and the whole verse was worth a read but the lenth wasnt but all together nice drop...

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Old 09-23-04, 05:52 PM   #36
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that was very very good piece...agree with^^^^^..but also agree with everyone else....1
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Old 09-25-04, 02:52 PM   #37
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uppping.......

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Old 09-25-04, 03:06 PM   #38
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Leangthy, yes, nice idea though. I read it two times before replying. To me it seems choppy, not the flow itself, the flows good. The story is choppy, like the descriptions. Nice vocab and imagery for the most part, if you would have made the story more fluid to make the imagery stand out more I think it would have been 9.5+. Good shit anyways my man, keep droppin. Peace. 7.7 overall.
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Old 09-28-04, 09:59 PM   #39
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iight nice feedback though now i know where to improve...
runing for nomination of best OPen MIc award of august..
IM NOT telling you to vote for me only if you fell this is the open mic of august then you can vote...
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Old 09-30-04, 07:26 PM   #40
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word that shits aight!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Old 09-30-04, 08:07 PM   #41
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hot shit..i'd like to see more of dis.....das like a song and a half if u add chrous to it..lol...good shit tho...~1~
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Old 10-01-04, 08:50 PM   #42
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Old 10-03-04, 12:09 PM   #43
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upping gotdamn you newbs sleep on every shit
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Old 10-03-04, 09:41 PM   #44
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Old 10-04-04, 08:28 PM   #45
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do i have to post 4 times for you fags to peep this shit out!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

scenario you owe my a feedback snd so does 6 other newbs.....
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