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03-09-05, 04:08 PM
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Voted For: final
final structure is good.. flow is on target.. you had no multis.. your imagery was nice throughout your verse.. emotion was present, and good, as well.. you went about the topic in a pretty nice way.. i enjoyed reading your verse.. CopyWrite structure is alright.. some of your lines were stretched though.. flow falls off a little.. because at times it seemed as if you over did the vocabulary.. you had nice multis.. imagery is alright.. once again, i think the vocabulary, while good at times, kind of took away from your verse.. emotion was pretty good.. i think you went about the topic in a pretty good way.. your verse had the potential to be tight, but i dont think you elaborated enough on what you were trying to say.. Overall CopyWrite had more multis.. and a better vocabulary.. both had pretty good emotion.. thought overused at times.. final had the better overall structure.. the more stable flow.. better imagery.. and elaborated better on the given topic.. so.. basing off of that.. i got final taking this.. pretty good battle though.. VOTE - FINAL Please hit up the link in my sig.. |
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03-10-05, 03:14 PM
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03-13-05, 09:12 PM
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03-17-05, 06:00 PM
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03-21-05, 03:19 PM
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03-21-05, 09:11 PM
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Voted For: final
Wow ok let me break this down a little so my vote doesnt get DQ'ed Final: good verse as usual.. good wordplay and consistency. I dont really like the topic but i guess you made it work for you. Emotion was decent, some really good imagery lines and some not so great ones but still decent.. Vocab was good also, once again could have been better. Overall: 7.9/10 CopyWrite: Your verse was utterly wack for this one reason: Too much vocabulary, i couldnt tell if you were writing about this topic or something completely wrong because you over did it with the vocab. And your rhyme scheme was so terrible as were your set ups. I mean half the words were in the wrong spots, there were no commas to signify the end of the brief sentence, so it was ongoing and that made it worse. divine addictions twined restrictions doomed prescriptions homeless evictions all mark the end of a era unforgetable hard saught thoughts revinve deaths enetible All that vocab and it was pointless.. didnt rhyme made no sense and plain wack. Put some emotion and imagery in there.. And how about you keep the topic in mind while writing it would help you stop from doing this sstupid shit. You will never win a battle if you overdo the vocab. Overall: 2.8/10 Vote: Final obviously and if anyone votes otherwises its a crock. Because that other guy does not know a real topical verse if it smacked him in the face. It was all vocab nothing else. That isnt a topical piece its a fucking dictionary lol. Return the favor with an honest vote on any battle in my sig. TY
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03-23-05, 06:32 PM
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03-27-05, 12:43 PM
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03-31-05, 08:15 PM
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Voted For: final
Decree good stcutre and the flow was good nice syllable count your vocabulary was very very good. but your imagery i didnt really read a story. you just babled about shit with big vocabulary. and using all the vocab kinda dropped the flow a bit. the worst part was the imagery it just lacked a bit. work on doing sotry's maybe about someone goin through death and your having the stuggle having to go through it with them. it hurts them it hurts all around them. ya know. peace Compose: well something i noticed that you had better is that you kind of had a story to yours not quite much more but you had a bit better imagery. i still feel as if you need to work on your story's but i know you might think that yours is that toher type of topical but stories are better. the vocabulary was good. the emotion was alot better. peace RTF in my topical battle with oreo links in the sig peace |
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