Well, first and formost thank your for your input. Think about this mkay. When your with a bomb ass chick right and walkin´ in the mall. You wanna hold her hand and put your arm around her to show her off.
Now about me kissing Hip Hop. Ever seen people freestyling? You know you been waiting for that moment to jump in and show people what you got. That is what I mean by the kiss. People laughing at me because I was trying to freestyle.
I didnt forget what I was writing about. I thought this through for a while and it took forever. I am a slow writer.
Well thank you and the favor will be returned!

Sweft

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^^^take in to consideration this type of format and
style of writing on rv is new to him, that is one of themain reasons
he got such good feedback... not sure if your a vet or just a noob that thinks
he knows what hes talkin bout but realistically it was a good piece and all
the people that said it ws a 10/10 are not very good themselves...
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!

Thats the best OM/Poetry ive ever read.. seriously amazing amazing
U kept the reader hooked on ur story, i just couldnt wait to finish reading it
Not only that, but u kept ur Flow and didnt force any rhymes
Loved it man, ill look out for ur future OM's

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this is a very good piece and is WAY beyond my level in poetry....but i've only been at it for 2 years now so yea....you had a few lines that mafe me lose interest but i don't feel like going back to them but most of the poem had me very deep in interest....you can work on your metas and shit....structure is always important to me in text....so work on that too....this should definantly be stickied tho....i aint into Nas or anything so i can't agree with anyone on that....but this was a very good piece, very good imagery and all the emotion was there....i was thinkin it was a girl at first cuz the first verse i can relate to in that way so when you threw that twist in i was like wow he's good lol...decent vocab and yea....we can all elevate and that's the truth you get a 9/10
return some feed on the next OM or poem i do
i'll pm you the link
peace

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whoah, what a explanation..

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Damn hommie...great drop, a love letter to hip hop...the concept has been thought of b-4, but you really made it work for you. The emotion was obviously tha strongest aspect of this drop. Ya structure was a lil off in some places, but ya vivid rhymes made every line enjoyable. Great Drop

Overall...9.5/10

RTF on a link in tha sig