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Natural killa 5 62.50%
@. 3 37.50%
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Old 09-26-05, 06:42 PM   #46
noname
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Originally Posted by CarsonJet
Voted For: @.

ok...merlin.

2000 post in a month, this is the result of no life rejections
^thats a double negative....should be Life's Rejections
you more like dry sex............you simply a fake fuck
That was a pretty dope ass line.
so im'a make you fuckin disapear like the casino forum
Good Metaphore

Alotta garbage with a few Gems in it. Not too bad. 6/10.

ok...killa.

not much to quote.
For one your shit is way stretched. just your font makes it look all pretty,neat,an short.
Alot of your lines were way to technical to the point where they made no sense.
simplify your shit, and you'll be better.
o yeh....and dont stretch your lines. simplicity is key. 4/10

Vote. Merlin.


"so im'a make you fuckin disapear like the casino forum"

^this is a similie...not metaphor.

but..anyways..uppin....
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Old 10-05-05, 05:11 PM   #47
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fake rappers get on the net,they tend to foget about life behind them
fag forgot he tryna come up on my site, so let me remind him.
nice opener...5/10


in registration you should of never agreed to the terms and conditions
Not one Rv crew wants you, I guess you've learned your position
Haha good punch 7/10
2000 post in a month, this is the result of no life rejections
you need this "flow to "surivive" like introvenous injections
another good punch nice similie 7/10
naturally killing shit,cause your post makes us all laugh to death
never survive as long as me, like you halfed your breath
okay punch...6/10
your broke, like fogetting "flour" while baking you wont get your "cake up"
you more like dry sex............you simply a fake fuck.
haha funny punch...8/10
this battle remains one sided, like I cut you in half
Each one of your lines dont hit,like a punch in the dark
meh...decent coulda been better 4/10
My aproach is perfect position like a snipers roof
battle me? you bit of more than you can chew,like he hyped is tooth
haha good punch 7/10
you couldnt tie a punch together if you gums were rope
grabbing "faiths" ass, relising to win you need tons of "hope"
haha nice punch 8/10
nigkah dont get me started i read ya verses ,pure boredom
so im'a make you fuckin disapear like the casino forum
haha good punch 6/10
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dag tons of vocab...kinda made the flow off...decent tho 5/10

okay you came harder with punches and your flow was on point cept the last bar......didnt have any real personals....so that kinda sucks...lol.....but you had aiight vocab not too much cept the last bar again.....but you had a similie or two which helped you out...overall 63/100

nat-
your drop was too long to crit like y's but yeah ima do a good explanation...

aiight you had some pretty good punches.....but some lacked cuz of flow and just didnt hit that hard....your flow was off at a couple points whish hurt you as well.....your personals lacked as well...they didnt really hit that hard.....but props for attmpting.....also you had some vocab but for how long ur drop was it coulda used a lil more that what you had.....but props for adding some period......also your structure wasnt the greatest.....but thats no biggie to me.......but work on it some....some punches seemed forced also which is what hurt you and because they seemed forced tit hurt the flow.....so try not to force punches......but i say some decent wordplay in there which was nice but overall if i would rate it out of a 100 like ys i'd say it would be close but just not quite there cuz he had more landed and herder punches overall...so i'd give it a 57/100

but nice battle for the both.......
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Old 10-05-05, 05:31 PM   #48
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Old 10-06-05, 05:03 PM   #49
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Old 10-06-05, 05:08 PM   #50
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Old 10-07-05, 03:43 AM   #51
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Old 10-13-05, 05:06 PM   #52
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uppin this shit...................................
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Old 10-14-05, 05:53 PM   #53
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uppin.............................................
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Old 10-15-05, 05:29 PM   #54
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Old 10-16-05, 12:15 PM   #55
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Old 10-17-05, 07:17 PM   #56
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Old 10-17-05, 07:35 PM   #57
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Lmao @ this battle still being open.

Why's That?

fake rappers get on the net,they tend to foget about life behind them
fag forgot he tryna come up on my site, so let me remind him.
Filler.. as it is just the intro..
in registration you should of never agreed to the terms and conditions
Not one Rv crew wants you, I guess you've learned your position
The concept is true.. wasn't worded that well though..
2000 post in a month, this is the result of no life rejections
you need this "flow to "surivive" like introvenous injections
Decent..
naturally killing shit,cause your post makes us all laugh to death
never survive as long as me, like you halfed your breath
Nah..
your broke, like fogetting "flour" while baking you wont get your "cake up"
you more like dry sex............you simply a fake fuck.
Decent..
this battle remains one sided, like I cut you in half
Each one of your lines dont hit,like a punch in the dark
Ehh.. Almost decent..
My aproach is perfect position like a snipers roof
battle me? you bit of more than you can chew,like he hyped is tooth
Nah..
you couldnt tie a punch together if you gums were rope
grabbing "faiths" ass, relising to win you need tons of "hope"
Cool..
nigkah dont get me started i read ya verses ,pure boredom
so im'a make you fuckin disapear like the casino forum
Ehh..
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The same Phonetic Ego Ravaged, Continuing Investigation Sees Illness Obliterating his Nucleus’
Nah..

Natural Killa

ya hand's doin the rounds cuz in the text,ysdat/@. can't make a sound
Moves in the industry?,shit,jumpingjacks in the power plants doesn't count
Nah..
u the one spouce pre-writing shit,n don't deny bitch cuz you ain't hiding shit
only throne/trown i see you sittin on is when the balls bounce from u riding it
Didn't connect..
he's a soakin faggot,n for him to bust he gotta pay the token,n hack-it
if this fag's fighting see-veer(severe) then he's swingin wit a broken racket
Forced..
the shit u barging in get's dilaped from me with this spit with the carnage
u musta pulled out costumes from the attic to spit that garb.-age(garbage)
Forced..
in the forums you hated n u the one pussy I can say I'm glad I neva ate-it
must be judging voices of kittens cuz in this bitch you purr-pet-u-rated
Forced to shit..
i spit my worse like an addict,n still beat ya,ya be goin at it,n they teach ya
this a battle on punches but I ain't hear a piss from you like damaged urthreas
Nah, man..
u spit off the beat n gettin shit on by the elite,so sit down from the re-seat(reciept)
n the record you have at current's weak,like the level we swimmin knee-deep
Not a punch..
u respectable?,no,like mexicans suddenly becomin fashionable ur neva cred-I-bull
you shoulda stuck to top-pickles like crazy gluing the peak on vegetables
Forced..
teach to stop bein my shadow round the forums after u feel the incideration
pre-written or not,you still gettin whipped up like smarty jones rehabliltation
Worded poorly.. decent concept..
how's you an expert on makin it when you urself thrown ya cards for gators
the lay-ball(label) you signing with is when you squat down on the ANR for favors
Forced..
cruise the boo's cuz you wanted something keyed?,well u chose to lose
so bring your basic rhyme scheme,one sllyable shit,n get votes for it too
Decent..
cuz that's what this site's about when they ride you aloud n brag
i told u set it up in EFL n you went n put it here for clout,it's sad
Worded to shit..
following me n abusin it n this shit's like rocky vs apollo n you still lose it
only way you winning this bitch is by the herbs you got swallowin ya pubic's
Played to hell..
bored of ur rhymes,all of em played,shit,it's like someone ignored the times
cuz your idea of keyin this is unlockin the closet where u stored those lines
Nope..
told him to squash this beef,but like speakin to air,i saw no reasonin with this
n don't worry ysdat/@...we don't need the dot in the name to see the bitch
Cool..

Overall, this battle was too fucking long, lol. Anyway, Why's That? had quite a few decent lines.. some of the shit didn't connect, but some of it was average.. nothing really stood out as dope. Natural Killa had a verse full of forced wordplay (e.g. lay ball/label, garb age/garbage) and it just fucked up most of his verse. At the end he picked up a few decent punches, but before that his verse was pretty much trash. So, in conclusion, Why's That? gets my vote for having a better overall verse.

Vote - Why's That?
 
Old 10-18-05, 02:53 AM   #58
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The same Phonetic Ego Ravaged, Continuing Investigation Sees Illness Obliterating his Nucleus’


Wow.. a bit line, you're soo dope.
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