I wont comment on text, as I dont do it really, and don't want to point you in the wrong direction.

However your topical is fairly basic. I noticed you use an aa/bb rhyme scheme, and that isnt bad but its boring. Your subject matter isnt very appealing either. It isnt very interesting. It flows well, but like I said its very basic. Try adding in a few multies, mixing up the wordplay... dont be so basic.

A few pointers to help you but as it stands I would have to pass on you joining the fams my man.

Peace.

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Mak man, you know where I stand on this... Atty and I are complete opposite in decision as far as I know. I don't mind having you back in the fams as long as you stay active. I'm aware of previous reasons you went inactive and everyone does it. Thats life, no big deal.

If you want to come back, first and foremost you need to get with Atty. Secondly I want to see that you're consistantly active for a time.

Peace man.

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so i can't join and have someone like S.V elavate me because i really wanna be in a dope crew and all and get elavated rather than bein in a dead fricken crew with barley any elavation.

no responce?

^^ you fucking suck

Don't let "LIL' CALI" into your crew, f'real, you guys gonna lose soooooo much respect if you do.

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no u fuckin faggot actually ima get elavation and then after that ima fuckin RIP you.

It's not that I don't want him in the crew, I just don't trust the fact that he says he's going to stay active. I mean, he's been in like twice I think, both times to which he really didn't do all to much. So it's not benifits C.S. in anyway. I dont know, maybe we can set up like a probationary period or something, but Im not just going to let him in because I can't trust him on word alone after having that falter in the past.

Theory, first of all, the whole Sv name mention thing really just bothered me. That just worked in the complete oposite direction for you, because I could careless who you know... Sv could personally Pm me requesting that I let you in and the only thing that will accomplish is that I'll actually look at your try-out. But I'm still going to decide based on whats best for the crew, not who's Sv's buddy. Even so, your writing isn't up to par, and realistically even if someone said they would help you elevate I would still say no. If you can get Sv to help you elevate, that's great, do it... And after you've worked with him and you've elevated feel free to come back to try out and we'll move on from there. Having someone below a nessisary standard on the roster does no good for CS, so when you reach that standard, only then will you even be concidered.

CS is not an elevation crew... We're not here to babysit and play mommy to aspiring writers. Elevation is a pain in the ass, but we've all gone through it and gotten to where we're at. So, sorry but, you're not getting any breaks from me.

Will you elevate me atty.

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Oh I'll elevate you good baby mmmmmm

^homo .

^^^wow with a capital W.

i really had nothing to do with this dude theory's previous comments (peep my earlier post in this thread)...
...however, (for some reason) this post felt like it was a partial slap in my face (like I have NO SAY with MY FAMILY if I wanted to).

but, im sure it was just a simple misunderstanding with words, right atty???


s.v.

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Plain and fuckin' simple, theory, fuck off and elevate. No disrespect but you need too ^.

SV, I dont think Atty ment to disrespect you bro, just trying to get it across that just because you know someone doesnt mean youget into the fams.

Peace.

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Thats exactly what im doin cus C.S Is my old fam and i wanna get in this.

Then continue to do it and stop asking to be in over and over again.

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