this is a spoken word piece which i plan on doing for def poetry in december but id like to get some feedback on it first




I stand before you as a voice whos been chosen.
In a country where the symbol of justice is blindfolded.
Amidst chains but shackles that still remain on liberty’s arms.
Where people starve while missiles are hid in the soil of forms.
I walk down the streets paved in gold......
For every dealer on a corner where poison is sold.
I drown in oceans of blood and tears of mothers,
For those who claim brothers under similar colors then bang on each other.
Artists paint symbols on skin of soldiers long forgotten,
As we pick from fields of concrete searching for cotton.
With no shirts and shorts we play on courts covered in glass shells.
But the only 3’s we get precede 6’s and 9’s in prison cells.
Inner hells burn our souls in flames until we forget heavenly placement.
Children die in diamond mines.........
..............until we kill for stones and still end up in braclets
Inhale cancer the smoke hiding answers that can be solved with patience.
So in a land of freedom,we choose to answer hatred with hatred
As days fall like autumn leaves the vivid colors making rainbow patterns.
I stand in crumbling castles, a crown shattered and robes tattered.
And my kingdom of broken syringes and subjects enslaved to addiction.
Where story’s of glory are told across the lines of fact and fiction.
Those who protect and serve are wolves in a land of sheep.
Where dead men roam accross graveyards while the reaper sleeps.
Children fall while foreign posions destroy thier parents frames.
And the road to riches and redemption exists on transparent lanes.
A proclamation of emancipation is given to those who toiled adjacent.
A signed statement with the signature of slaves owning racists.
So I stand before you as a voice whose has been chosen.
In a country where my symbol of justice is blindfolded.
Amidst chains but shackles that still remain on libertys arms.
Where people starve while missiles are hid in the soil of farms
Revolution….............
Lets get it on !!!!!!!!!!!!!!









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