topic: A window to escape

Due:dec. 1
voting ends: dec 5th

__________________
SOFT FOCUS crew record (3-0) Wits end ~ DOI ~ Central....now who's next?
sacred scriptures record (5-0)

in....

in, 'll drop today, right now

Jack Was Unlucky...Wrong Place, Wrong Time
Got Busted Wrongfully...Now Serving 25 To Life
Hes Rotting In A Cell...Akin To A Wild Lion Caged
Having Lost All Personality...Just A Number, No Name
Staring Out His Window...But Always Failing To See
His Soul Remains A Widow...Mourning His Identity
Cellmates With No Feelings...Satan Spawn Them All
Making Jack's Stomach Churn... And His Spirits Fall
Dim Lights Illuminate...All That Depleted Jack Has Left
A Lifetime Of Prison Food...& A Rugged, Shallow Breath
Blasted Window Stays...Constantly Showing Jack
The Error In His Ways...& What He Could Never Have
Appeals All Tossed Aside... Pain Consumed His Days
But It Always Ate Inside...The Window To Escape
Visitors Remained At None...They Were Strictly Forbode
But Finally His Plans Were Done...Break Out On His Own
That Window Had Showed...The Way To Live A Free Life
He Must Break Out Or Die Trying...And Slip Into The Night
Many Months Had Passed...Waiting For The Perfect Time
Day Had Finally Come At Last... The Smell Of Grass Divine
The Day Drew Slowly...Clock's Hands, They Seemed To Stall
Plate Stamping Irrelevant...In The Superior Light Of It All
Dawn Into Noon...At A Slug Pace, Noon Drew Into Dusk
Jack Had To Swallow A File...Guards Search Every Orethesis
That Night The Light Clicked..& Prison Plummeted Into Dark
All Except For Jack... He Slowly Crept To The Window Bars
Chiseling Of The Bars Done...No Inmate Would Ever Forget
The Day Jack Had Tried To Run..And Got A Bullet In The Head.

.....Blissfully intwined in that thing you call Hesitation.....
.....the only other respect I give is to Divine Intervention.....
.....see both of these affect your life,In 1 way or Another.....
.....from the seed of all Creation, to the life of your own Brother.....
.....there feelings that are uncomfortable I jus cant describe.....
.....a compendium without the flow & a Song w/out the Vibe.....
.....its not easy to Define and to Hollow to cross the Line.....
.....if i could stand the truth then I'd make this Sonnet Mine.....
.....but in a way wot can i say...i stand tomorrow, i stand Today.....
.....I strive to make it years Away to maybe watch my Child Play.....
.....Explicit as it is...A Window to Escape is jus Solitude.....
.....for an over exemped mind..w/ a Conflicting Attitude.....
.....Devastating news for those who think they can Hide Behind.....
.....a Personality thats Dark N Grim, wen in all Truth you're Kind.....
.....Aggrevated Deception is another form of your Exemption.....
.....like a kid made to pay...still locked up in Detention.....
.....your still praying for Attention but i can't give it Out.....
.....my minds still unMatured..i can't tell you what its About.....
.....jus useless Advice locked up in a Grip Tight Vice.....
.....the Window goes to whole new levels jus like House Mice.....
.....so was the peace Affective...Did it help you to Make.....
.....a decision that prevents you...avoiding a Window of Escape.....

3 voted on--

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...1262#post951262
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...1270#post951270
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...1280#post951280

a2z dont forget to put ya three battles up....................
____________________________________________

pz my angel of brian may

A2Z - That was a nice verse, very good imagery. I pictured the whole thing through my mind. You had pretty good vocab, and your rhyme scheme didnt mess with the flow. I normal onr would, big up on that one. It was good on the topic, I felt how that person is feelings. Very nice hommie... 9 / 10

PhiL - You had a good verse to hommie. You lacked the imagery, and kinda a downfall on the vote. You had good flow, nice rhyme scheme. I was feeling how you took it, maybe could have been longer. But I have the same problem. It was just a nice drop, but didnt grab my attention to much.
Keep elevatin Hommie, Nice drop... 8 / 10

Vote - A2Z

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

__________________

Decent Battle..
Phil Is Still Learnin
A2Z Is Still Improvin

Phils Verse Wasnt Together..
A2Z, Well He Knows..
Next Time Make It Better..
A2Z Gets My Vote..

^ n' Im Dope

A2Z Had An Overal Better Verse
Vote - A2Z

that was great explainin!!! ????????????????????????

huh...no wonder title was stripped......

Omg. .What A Whiner.. Title Was Stripped Cuz Of A mix Up
In IPs So Shut Up Fuck Roll..

Jesus.. For The Bitch..
A2Z's Rhyme Scheme Was Better Than Yours.. He Had
An Overall Better Flow To His. He Had A Wittier Verse
Than Yours. Yours Was Simple.. And Thought A2z Had
Sumwhat Of A Played Concept, He Used It Well. You
Weren't Horrible. I'll Give You That, But You Didn't Possess
Enough To Pull Of The Win In This Match.. Damn

Get an Attitude Readjustment

lol..i was playin but i appreciate the further explanation...peeps deserve a decent explanation..thats all i wanted..not you sayin you were dope and rhyming about the vote..no hate pz

I'd like to ask something, A2z...

How the fuck do you swallow and then pass a file?

Sounds slightly impossible, my man.

Not to mention, excruciating.

Anyway...

I'm gonna have ta go against the majority here and toss my vote to Brix or whatever fuckin name he's goin by now.

I thought the story A2z brought has been told a thousand times.

I didn't think he told it in a manner that brought any freshness or newness to it.

Brix surprised me by hitting some nice vocab, real good flow, and some good complexity.

I agree with whoever said he lacked imagery, true, true.

But I've seen A2z's imagery in at least a dozen different movies.

No beef, both verses were good, just didn't vibe with one as well as the other.

Final vote: Brixton

Peace

__________________
Merkings will occur Monday thru Friday, 8 am thru 5 pm, C.S.T.
For my convenience, not yours!

I thought A27 Took this........his story gripped me
and wouldnt let me go.......great imagery and a v. nice concept
Brix...V.good my man, you get better every week
a nice solid verse but didnt quite have the creativity in my eyes
Props Brix...you show alot of potential...

V. A2Z