im back for one more open mic, yes yes, its da original garanteed a.k.a. mjust23

"THE CLIP"

Hook
what keeps niggas in line
The Clip
What stays in posket
The Clip
And what owns da block
The Clip

verse 1
(spit it medium speed)

If i reload and pump
niggas in da chest, shels rite in da front
clip clip on da tek
ima connect on da neck u wanna bet
pop off on the track,then pump off the back
nine in pocket, infared for a rat, shoot up a dream,lay niggas flat
dont trust ma shells, betta pray u get lucky
brains on da ground, to me shit is funny
gangsta for hire nigga i need some money
spittin on ma sleeve, nose is runny
menace to a health plan
drown nioggas, he cant if i can
u wanted warfare, nigga it come
west coast heat, u no were im from
inglewood warrior got straps
how u gone test ma gangsta nigga, got gatts
got niggas hogged tied to chairs
u got pistols, nigga i got pairs
this shit serious and i keep it real
talkin shit bout me, u must want da pill
electrical wires runnin through ya viens
fuck around, i send five shells runnin through ya frame
u wanna get gully, life ends today
its real gangsta guns, put the knifes away

hook(2x)

THATS ALL FOLKS

Serously its kinda good this is your last OM...to be honest witch is the best realy this was wack...not one line had the same Syllabus count...this throws the flow and structure....rhyme scheeme was also off....but i guess a good point of this om is that you stayed on topic for the most part..

5/10

~HeX~

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yo man you quitin lol you shouldent that was a oretty good song 6.5 outta 10 peace
and its brotherpara

thanx, uppin

I say Dont Quit and Keep Elevatin ... Cuz LAST open Mics should be something That will Impact dudes ... Keep Droppen Fam

dat was koo had a good flow
nice vocab wasn't all dat dough
coulda been better
6/10

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OPEN BATTLES
WORDPLAYA VS Word-Scape

thanx uppin

yo that was pretty dope nigga you shoudl elavate tho man

just need some vocab an dto make yer lines longer 6/10

yo dope shit man but need to elavate

7/10 you kinda talk westside to much

seawriter man stop freepostin in peoples shit dawg...damn...anywayz...this seriously needs to be elevated dawg...structure and flow was fucked because of the syllubus count, like Hexen said, and it had very little wordplay...the hook was aight but too short...maybe if i hear an audio or sumthin by you my opinions would change...btw...why you quittin??

uuummmm I say 6/10

it was okay but your vocabulary and rhymes were much
too simple for my taste but the good part about your drop
was that it flowed well enough to keep people reading....1

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thanx uppin