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10-24-04, 02:21 AM | #1 | |||||||
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Beyond the life
IP: 8B20 A98E
This is my shit here. A perfect example of how real story tellin gets down.
Some chick, highlighted horsehair laced with razorblades Face to face, tongue kissin a date that makes ya pay for aids Seein a guage to braces, leavin the latest traces Of ya favorite k swiss, cut up, different color reeses pieces Swingin matrix style, so it takes a while To touch the ground, not leavin much but sound Ringin off the blood, clingin soft to drugs Breathin costs ya lungs, but the pain remains And changes subtle, gangstas pace to huddle His brains been trained for pain but remains in a state Of blatant nothin, Satans uppin, the stakes His fates been comin since he gave him somethin He drank liquor, makin blood thinner and hes dyin faster Had a crew, but tonight the cast is lifeless caspers And ya cryin half the, tears of a fearless phantom Cuz no emotion flows in what it appears has happened Switch gears back to the peers that capped him A couple cheered assassins, 50 dollars richer And the body a gritty modest ficture What u should know is his former glory His less than morman story, shouldve warned him for me His family not long in mourning Cuz he'd been a problem forming His whole life So suppose the fools gold and cold ice, can make u grow twice As evil as the faux types, dickridin claimin u so nice So as gangsta as ya claim to be on the mic G'head and recon the stripes, see beyond the life
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Open Mics This verse here...... I teach u to flow, Grasshopper What It Is Beyond The Life Wins RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 ghetto cripple 5-0 NeXion 5-4 RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 SpokenBluntly 5-1 Losses ghetto cripple 5-0 Da Vinci 5-2 Gambino 5-2 Last edited by Killuminatic : 10-24-04 at 03:13 PM. |
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10-24-04, 03:15 PM | #2 | |||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 8B20 A98E
Damn yall sleepin on this shit
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Open Mics This verse here...... I teach u to flow, Grasshopper What It Is Beyond The Life Wins RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 ghetto cripple 5-0 NeXion 5-4 RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 SpokenBluntly 5-1 Losses ghetto cripple 5-0 Da Vinci 5-2 Gambino 5-2 |
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10-24-04, 03:18 PM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 0825 899A
jus fix yo structure
fow was good topic was coo too but done before but not alot wordplay I give you thumbs up for too 7/10 keep droppin I need some competition here on ope mic.. peep mine http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=156980
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The Competition
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10-24-04, 04:20 PM | #4 | |||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 8B20 A98E
Uppin this again
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Open Mics This verse here...... I teach u to flow, Grasshopper What It Is Beyond The Life Wins RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 ghetto cripple 5-0 NeXion 5-4 RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 SpokenBluntly 5-1 Losses ghetto cripple 5-0 Da Vinci 5-2 Gambino 5-2 |
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10-24-04, 06:22 PM | #5 | |||||||
bringin' new thoughts to the name disability-flossed in tight wear shiny shoes you feelin' me
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IP: 6BB9 F817
nice work i like the "date that makes ya pay for aides" line was tight.
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Battle's
openmic
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killuminatic K.O.
Big Woody K.O.
Da Solution 5-1
Big Woody 5-2
LOSSES
killuminatic K.O.
Da Jokah K.O.
Whiskey 5-2
dawgfatha_13 5-3
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10-24-04, 10:24 PM | #6 | |||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 8B20 A98E
uppin this .......
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Open Mics This verse here...... I teach u to flow, Grasshopper What It Is Beyond The Life Wins RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 ghetto cripple 5-0 NeXion 5-4 RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 SpokenBluntly 5-1 Losses ghetto cripple 5-0 Da Vinci 5-2 Gambino 5-2 |
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10-24-04, 10:27 PM | #7 | |||
Get Cooked Hoe
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IP: 0825 899A
Word Dis Is Some Good Flow Shit Here
Fix Ya Struture More Vocab...........but Either Way Dis Some Good Shit Ish Yo Put An Feedback In My Open Mic The Death Night P.2 Plz I'll Preciate Tha Feedback..........word
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10-24-04, 11:31 PM | #8 | |||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 8B20 A98E
Need some more feedback. This is some good shit quit sleepin
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Open Mics This verse here...... I teach u to flow, Grasshopper What It Is Beyond The Life Wins RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 ghetto cripple 5-0 NeXion 5-4 RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 SpokenBluntly 5-1 Losses ghetto cripple 5-0 Da Vinci 5-2 Gambino 5-2 |
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10-24-04, 11:38 PM | #9 | |||||||
bringin' new thoughts to the name disability-flossed in tight wear shiny shoes you feelin' me
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IP: CD96 0C90
what the hell is with this you start a battle and i not even agree to it, thats bullcrap, im'a do it anyways but im'a throw down 2marrow,i see you just accepted that means you gonna throw ya verse down in 30 then. nice.
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Battle's
openmic
WINS
killuminatic K.O.
Big Woody K.O.
Da Solution 5-1
Big Woody 5-2
LOSSES
killuminatic K.O.
Da Jokah K.O.
Whiskey 5-2
dawgfatha_13 5-3
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10-24-04, 11:45 PM | #10 | |||||||
bringin' new thoughts to the name disability-flossed in tight wear shiny shoes you feelin' me
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IP: CD96 0C90
im likin that casper line alot about the crew and all that, mad tight, im'a kill you kill'.
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Battle's
openmic
WINS
killuminatic K.O.
Big Woody K.O.
Da Solution 5-1
Big Woody 5-2
LOSSES
killuminatic K.O.
Da Jokah K.O.
Whiskey 5-2
dawgfatha_13 5-3
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10-24-04, 11:51 PM | #11 | |||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 8B20 A98E
Dont be beefin with me on this shit. theres other places for that. And i dropped my shit already, AFTER u agreed to it. Dont act like u didnt.
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Open Mics This verse here...... I teach u to flow, Grasshopper What It Is Beyond The Life Wins RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 ghetto cripple 5-0 NeXion 5-4 RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 SpokenBluntly 5-1 Losses ghetto cripple 5-0 Da Vinci 5-2 Gambino 5-2 |
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10-25-04, 12:07 AM | #12 | |||||||
bringin' new thoughts to the name disability-flossed in tight wear shiny shoes you feelin' me
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IP: CD96 0C90
whats with the pic of pun, dont you have to pay for crap like that??????
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Battle's
openmic
WINS
killuminatic K.O.
Big Woody K.O.
Da Solution 5-1
Big Woody 5-2
LOSSES
killuminatic K.O.
Da Jokah K.O.
Whiskey 5-2
dawgfatha_13 5-3
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10-25-04, 12:25 AM | #13 | |||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 8B20 A98E
U dont have to pay for shit.
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Open Mics This verse here...... I teach u to flow, Grasshopper What It Is Beyond The Life Wins RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 ghetto cripple 5-0 NeXion 5-4 RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 SpokenBluntly 5-1 Losses ghetto cripple 5-0 Da Vinci 5-2 Gambino 5-2 |
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10-25-04, 12:28 PM | #14 | |||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 3240 794D
GOOD SHIT YO YALL GIVE SOME FEED ON THIS ITS NOT TO BE SLEPT ON IM FORREAL I put that in all caps when i said so i know they see it..lol...but any way good word play it was very creative an very well said I give it a 10-10 for signs of greatness
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My level of battle is your problem. Not minds. So dont toss me till to you tried me. This is my ring. You cant box me. I'll drop rocky. I've climbed the mountain's Making all contenders obsolete. All you bitches is running like water fountain knocking me!! Defeat list Young Beezy out come:5-o Lost Battles:none out come none |
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10-25-04, 07:56 PM | #15 | |||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 8B20 A98E
Thanks for the feedback yall keep it comin
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Open Mics This verse here...... I teach u to flow, Grasshopper What It Is Beyond The Life Wins RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 ghetto cripple 5-0 NeXion 5-4 RoC-a-FeLlA 5-0 SpokenBluntly 5-1 Losses ghetto cripple 5-0 Da Vinci 5-2 Gambino 5-2 |
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