Talkin: Im dedicatin this song to the FAB'S - Faggot Ass Bitches, haha, intermental comin down to ure residentials, haha, fall back bitches

Verse One

Im killin yall niggas like I got a liscence, admit it nigga im youre all life crisis
Im comin for the crown, cos Im quickly becomin the hottest nigga around
Im packed like a suicide bomber, killin yall niggas like i was Osama
Yall cats good, but I be better, faggot ass bitch ill kill you with my berreta
There some hot niggas in this joint, but also some faggot ass bitches
Jus fall back and be amazed and dazed at my muthafukin hot shit
Thats the closest thing yall will get to readin some praise
You wont even be better than me, if you practised for months and days
Suck a dick bitch, cos thats bout all you can do
You rep your hood but still nigga you cant even get into the worst crews
Fuck wit me, and then fo sho ill knw ure a fool, cos inter only speaks true.

Hook

There are so many faggot ass bitches
Claimin there hard and they got riches
But all they do is get ripped shit
Out of them, stupid faggot ass bitches

Verse Two

Wow a whole song devoted to yall, youre probably be celebratin
You talk bout your girls, but the only action u get is when u masturbatin
Faggot ass bitches, say they into gangs, blood and crip shit
But you would never go down to the ghetto, cos u cud never make it on tht level
You wear a bandana to look gangsta but like Lloyd Banks said "All I see is a handkerchief"
You wanna be down wit me, pm'in me to vote in ure battles, i dont fuck with u wanksta bitch
Jus go back to ure wannabe gangsta style, cos you dont belong here
Cos it full of real niggas that get kicks outta ure rhymes, oh dear
I think we got a name for - Faggot Ass Bitches - FAB
Haha, Intermental signing out, bitch dont fuck with me

Hook

There are so many faggot ass bitches
Claimin there hard and they got riches
But all they do is get ripped shit
Out of them, stupid faggot ass bitches

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Same thing u said its currently crew vs crew but all bullshit aside i will leave honest feed:

1st of all, catchy hook, was kept short which is always good and it was def catchy,
Content wise, some fire was brought:

Faggot ass bitches, say they into gangs, blood and crip shit
But you would never go down to the ghetto, cos u cud never make it on tht level

That is very true,

The way you did this piece, it was definetly a direct approach which is always good but i feel if some analogies and metaphors had been thrown in it would of been a HOT piece instead of just a good one.
Also structure wise, i felt that it did flow of course but i didnt like the way you would have two lines rhyming but then on the next line just having the 1st half of the line rhyme with the 2nd then later on having 3 lines rhyme, this is obviously pretty str8 if this was in audio but i feel in text what ever scheme you go with, you should use consistantly throughout as it does harm the flow so even though flow is evident, i felt it could of flowed alot smoother

(returning the favour)

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You speak the truth but the thing is I am audio, I rap it then I write it ya feel me, I would be an audio head but i dnt got a mike or a computa that has a socket for a mike

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this was weak no hate....
no creativeness in this diss if it was...
simple lines....
ok diss...
u spoke the truth on a few lines which made it good but i know u probley could of spent more time on it then u did but not a bad drop...

6.5/10

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thanks..................upppin

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uppin....................

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