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Old 05-15-07, 08:41 PM   #1
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When She's Gone (Dopeness)

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This song I recorded about someone very important to me. The title speaks for itself.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pag...m?bandID=424396

It's called "When SHe's Gone". Beat is done by VTZ and me on both the verses. I did the whole thing in about 20 minutes. From writing to recording and mixing.


I left feed on "Holding On" and "Goodbye"
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Old 05-16-07, 03:28 AM   #2
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rofl @ making a track about a car, this is gonna be interesting as fuck. Intro qualitys on your vocals are good. Like the sample, who done the beat?

I only played the first 30 seconds cause my computers slow as fuck and wouldnt load it. But your flow was off I mean, your bar lengths are too short for the length of these bars IMO, it juts sound like your lines finished to early, which fucked your flow.

Ill listen properlywhen my computers not being a snail.
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Old 05-16-07, 03:44 AM   #3
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My flows off? Meh...don't understand that part. But I guess that's something I'll work on.

THanks.
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Old 05-16-07, 01:18 PM   #4
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^^^^everybodies different ur flow may sound off to him but i dunno i think its on point.....but i aint really feelin the beat....it reminds me of prison music lol.....wow it sounded like the beat jus went lower lol.......overall this was str8......keep doin ur thing....and holla at my homie lol =1=
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Old 05-16-07, 01:56 PM   #5
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^^^oh yeah no doubt man. thanks for the feed.
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Old 05-17-07, 01:45 PM   #6
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diggin the beat and sample for sure. but u sound a lil off beat to me too, that or your just not spittin fast enough to the beat. good story lyrics. kinda nasty if i didnt know it was bout a car. kinda funny concept, came wit some clever lines for the original concept. decent track, too odd for it to be commercial and catchy, doubt thats what u goin for though but werd
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Old 05-22-07, 06:39 PM   #7
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listenin...love this sample lol

flows seems like it goin a lil too fast for the beat, it kinda ends before the end of the beats measure/bar...id say either make each line a lil longer, slow down your pace, or add an echo to the end of eas line...lol at makin this shit so serious about a car, lol still dope tho....original....story is on point, overall not bad just work on that flow a bit

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Old 06-13-07, 11:16 PM   #8
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beat is nice... flow is off a lil to me.. then it gets on then off.. but the lyrics and delivery is ok... this was decent.. i herd better from you...
7/10
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Old 06-14-07, 12:44 AM   #9
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What's hot:

1 Sample on the beat
2 Flow works nicely on the beat
3 Topic/personal soundin lyrics


What needs work:

1 Lack of complex rhyming
2 Flow is consistent, but unchanging
3 Needs ad libs on the hook


Overall:

Nice soundin track man
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Old 06-15-07, 11:06 AM   #10
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wtf? i just wanna say this shit isn't off beat lmao
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Old 06-15-07, 02:01 PM   #11
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thats what i was thinkin but i dont wanna come in and argue with them..takes up too much of my time.
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Old 06-18-07, 06:48 PM   #12
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I haven't heard a solo from implicit in awhile. I'm feelin the beat, it lacks a real melody at start but it kicks in. Your lyrics is hot, flow is pretty good. I'm feelin ya story, you kinda have a voice like Lupe Fiasco in this joint. Good idea to let the hook run basic. your mixing is good, I'm def feelin this joint man nice job.

rtf here: http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3172563
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Old 06-19-07, 11:16 AM   #13
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theres no way u could actually write record and mix this in 20 minutes... thats almost not even possible if u freestyled both verses in one record take...
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Old 06-20-07, 03:06 AM   #14
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Yeah basically both verses were done in 1 take. And the writing was easy cause I had a bunch of different parts of it scattered in different notebooks so I just put it together for the first and then the second one I wrote quick.
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