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Old 02-01-04, 11:43 PM   #1
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Only A Certian Child Has Obscene Direction
Born With Out A Fathers Help Or Protection
We Never Met I Grew Up With No Man Influence
To Easily Make The Unknowlagable Into Sence
I Was Told He Walked The Stairs To Heavon
..I Prayed For Answers..
No Replies To Questions Nor A Simple Beckon
So Meaningful A Sons Memeries Of His Dad
Tears Fall Cause Of Bliss I Never Got To Have
I Know It Sounds Selfish But I'm Crying Inside
For Theres Only A Picture Of My Blood At My Side
Although My Mom Took Care Of The Depressing Hole
..In My Heart..
Some Feelings Of Emotions Where Out Of Her Control
I Feel As If I Was Beaton By A Unknown Ghost
A Christian Who Hates God For He Stole All Hope
When He Took My Father Breath So Easily Away
Picked A Tombstone That I Never Seen For His Grave
Mom Wouldn't Let Me Visite I Missed Some Factors
I Realised The Past Was Hard To see So It didn't Matter
Desires Burn From Emotional Flames I'd Run But I'm Choking
I See A son In A Fathers Arms Deaths Always Prevoking
Stare At My Only Picture Of My Father For Ambition
..I Was Named After You..
So To Make Your Name legendary Is My Life Mission
..I Turned Sixteen..
Off To Get My License An I Needed My Birth Certificate
Found A Box Of Letters To My Past Knowledgable Benifit
..Smiled In Answers..
Hid Hate For My Moms Betrayel Of My Dads Demies
I Was Secluded Sixteen Years Of Looking In your Eyes
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Old 02-02-04, 12:15 AM   #2
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This was pretty nice. I can kind of relate. I was named after my father and never knew him either. The only difference is he's stil alive. Anyway, nice emotion in this piece.

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I Know It Sounds Selfish But I'm Crying Inside


^That is nice

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A Christian Who Hates God For He Stole All Hope


^This has aplied ti me so many times. Its just ill.

I liked the piece. Keep up the good work.

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Old 02-02-04, 06:18 AM   #3
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shit man u get iller every drop aye...thi was hella good


Most of the lines were quotables and i can also relate to this peice as i have had the same problems dope work we have to do another collab soon.............peice
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Old 02-02-04, 03:27 PM   #4
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Thanks a lot for the positive feed...

Emotion i'm down for that collabo...get at me sometime with a topic
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Old 02-02-04, 04:21 PM   #5
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this was good, i really liked this piece man. It was awsome... lots of emotion, actually tellin somethin, and you had good vocab and flow. Great piece man. If you could hit me up with some feedback for my 2 drops that'd be greatly appreciatd.
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Old 02-02-04, 04:35 PM   #6
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damn this was ill...
very emotional...everything was on point wordplay etc...
heartfelt...
ill shit...keep spittin...

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Old 02-02-04, 06:58 PM   #7
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will do that tomorrow for you's...uppen
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Old 02-02-04, 07:27 PM   #8
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nice drop rule, you've elevated alot since the last time i've read your stuff. Vocab is really good, so was structure and flow, felt the emotion that you put into this, we can all relate to it in someway. Nice drop dawg kept me interested through out the whole thing, can't wait to see more from ya. keep droppin

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Old 02-03-04, 03:53 PM   #9
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will do...up
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Old 02-03-04, 03:58 PM   #10
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Hmm...I agree you do get iller with every drop...(although I still don't know why your name is rule and Jay is in your avy?)..anyway..this was a dope drop..you always come up with a dope concept(which as you know is a major plus..cayse half of the cats here are Gangstas~~~~LOL~~)..you had a great flow going on..and as always your vocab and wordplay was right on the money...good kob...peace...
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Old 02-03-04, 04:04 PM   #11
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I'm feeling this cuz, nice piece. Vocabulary was nice, this was well written. Made me want to hear more, creative shit cuz. Keep uppin.
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“Was Told He Walked The Stairs To Heavon
..I Prayed For Answers..
No Replies To Questions Nor A Simple Beckon”

Very deep line, to me.

Very nice emotional piece overall.
Kept flow, and you kept strength threw out this
Piece. This remind so of situation of my father when
He was around when I was a child. Good job on this piece

Stay dropping niceness
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Old 02-04-04, 08:33 PM   #13
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Thanks a lot for the replies...uppen
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