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08-26-05, 10:28 AM
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~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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"Still In Love Ch.2" (A Hip Hop Soap Opera)
IP: 0825 899A
Red-Mizz Fyre
Green-Tony Green Blue-Payne Orange-Limited Edition (when you click intro scroll down till you see Still In Love Slow Jamz) Intro *The unidentifed man comes and knocks on the door then he twist the nob and enters the house* A car screeching outside brought me back from my thoughts, I’m scared Three in the same room, unimaginable, for this outcome I was unprepared What the fuck..? What is all of this nonsense..!? I'm fuckin' her then two guys jump out the closet..!? All of the conflict is because your in bed with my wife. You a fucking home wrecker you causing pain and strife. ..O hell naw..!! ..I don't really understand what'z really goin on..? ..So tha whole time, u've lied & been stringin' me along.. ..I thought u told me that us b'in 2getha was meant 2 b.. ..Move 2 that house on tha hill so we could live happily.. One's her husband, and the other is a different affair!? Yeah, you grab that bitch, smack her, AND pull her hair! No explanations, I just glanced at each in turn, feeling a sense of shame He’s calling my name, many excuses but which one should I proclaim Hold up wait.......uno.....dos.... you and him.......... why are you in my house. Laying up on my couch, with my food and my spouse tip toeing thru my house quiter than a mouse. ..I treated u like my Queen, & would have brought u nethang ya wanted.. ..Evawhere we went u stayed on my arm, like a piece of Jewerly i flaunted.. ..I took u 2 my Momma'z House, & introduced u 2 all my fam.. ..U said how u much "Loved" me, but i c u were jus playin tha role of "Stan".. He raises a fist, grabs me by my hair, and swings me across the room The other two look in my direction, they still care, the arguments resume I would do it for you, but this is entertaining to watch Haha this chick thought I loved her...Hello? Knock knock? Is anybody in there..? Do you have brain or is it all air..? Everytime we saw eachother we'd fuck, do you think I care..? Fyre how could you do this to me we belonged together. Was down with you thru alaska and Rain Forest weather. You was my wife down..... thru thick and thin Anything else came we was loverz and friendz. I’m sobbing right now, what can I do, when I just wanna up and leave So naïve, how could I think that these three would be easy to decieve ..plus u said, U wanted 2 have great huge family wit me & live it up.. ..but i c u played ova all of us, your jus "Martini's", it'z obvious 2 c your all mixed up.. ..I feel used & abused by u ma, & i can't understand.. ..Afta all i have done 4 u & u turn around den cheat on me wit anotha man.. You were just too selfish, that's what your only flaw is... You cheated on your husband, that guy, AND me in the process And my nines tellin me to shoot..... a few shells up in you Hey man, calm down, don't be angry, man I barely knew... You fuck'd over my wife and then played her like a flute. I wouldn't be fuckin' her if I knew she was married to you! I catch a glimpse of the exit, I try to walk but now I can’t even stand This ain’t what I planned, a situation where I’m under their command Hold up Fyre..... cause I got a surprise for you.... And once you see who your not going to believe it too. *Take out my cell phone and gets to dialing a number* TO BE CONTINUED... |
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08-26-05, 10:36 AM
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IP: 0825 899A
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08-26-05, 11:34 AM
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Middle Weight
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IP: 8A05 210E
damn mayne i gotta say dat joint came 2getha quite well fa sho ~1~LUV~1~THUG~ word up
yeah i'm uppin diz also leave dat feedback regardless of good or bad no hate tho & we'll return tha favor no doubt
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08-26-05, 11:37 AM
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~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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IP: 3240 794D
word uppin.......
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08-26-05, 11:52 AM
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L.E
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IP: DB16 D9CD
Yeah this came together good...
Uppin' this shit.  Get at me when you wanna do Part 3. |
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08-26-05, 12:24 PM
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~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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IP: 3240 794D
iight uppin fo feed!
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08-26-05, 12:26 PM
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**the council**
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IP: 2E65 2D46
lol......uppin ya'll................
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08-26-05, 12:33 PM
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in your system
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
i liked the end, i thought the flow hurt this, well the different flows of people....too many shifting, and it was hard to follow at times, but not bad, have a good idea.....the end was cool, i think just work on wording, and maybe vocab a little too,
 ......yeah, good job though, keep uprtf on this http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=206108
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08-26-05, 01:13 PM
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~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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IP: 3240 794D
iight thanxx still uppin!
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08-27-05, 10:23 PM
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~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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IP: 3240 794D
damn uppin to the top!
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08-28-05, 01:14 PM
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~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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IP: 3240 794D
uppin..............
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