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Old 08-04-05, 06:15 PM   #1
Dervla
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Tweety vs @.

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Topic- God Has A Gun


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Old 08-04-05, 06:22 PM   #2
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@. has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-04-05 06:22 PM.
 
Old 08-04-05, 06:25 PM   #3
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Tweety has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-04-05 06:25 PM.
 
Old 08-07-05, 06:07 PM   #4
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As I sit infront of this tomb stone,reading your name
i try to imagine,why I sit here in vain
your pain was running so deep like oceans were full
its like intense radiation tryna remember you body still
................................


*Dose's off *


As I take the short cut and reach the porch front
I relise my doors shut And I want to pause but
somthing telling me to quickly vanish out of sight
I launch to a dark place like someone abolished light
a quick fright reveals a crucial moment in any mans life
laying next to me is my fathers eradiated body,no knife,
I cant move my bodys still like a statue's movie

-Pause-



I gota think,find a reason for this guys leaving
its right in front of my face but Im still not beleaving
Such a strong man's existance been removed with ease
the killer wants me,he just doing this to tease
kneeling above him resting my confused forhead on his chest
i wish i could of wrapped my body around him like a vest
speradic climate changes bring my temprature down
but Im still over heating when i hear a sound
as I glance above lifes destiny a witness the killer
this is the start of a lifes sequal like a new thriller
cant let this maniac get the best of me,i will fight
but how do i fight man whos kills as simple as turning off a light

*dies*
 
Old 08-07-05, 06:55 PM   #5
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Don't No show @.!........Cool.........................
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ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*
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Old 08-07-05, 10:17 PM   #6
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umm i allready poste my veres..lmao @ dont no show.
 
Old 08-08-05, 10:27 PM   #7
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-GOD HAS A GUN-

by
Lola Cruez



sitting on top of the skies, where no-one can see me
feeling so full with lust and devotion craving inside thee
looked around the world for that pearl, that special someone
someone who could fulfill and break this thy horny tension
The fingers feeling numb.” I can't control this any-Longer"
Fingers grabbing it quick as lightning. Moan loud as thunder
Up and Down his hand goes like an crazy uncontrolled elevator
Eyes Closed. He Pulled the Trigger and then all of them flaunter
Quickly, Open Pores of Sweats started to emerge on his forehead
He Felt so Worried that he aimed at the wrong place.
....................Them white droplets went down on the earth Instead
.
Happiness was all around. Everyone Smiling, enjoying there day
Black Clouds Started forming and white rain started to make it's way
Hitting on each persons head, light surrounding there mortal Bodies.
Jaws Open, Vocals making this sweat sound in a passion able agony
It was Like, Everyone was in a Choir singing Their Precious Voices
All Human Bodies drop dead on the floor and made this Orgy Noises
Fingers Touching Thier-Selfs,blood Rushing bezerk in their Vines
Eye's Widen in Craze, as everyone grabbed each-other and inflict Pain
When all finish, breathing like they had asthma. Each had red devil Eye's
Black Clouds Moved away, sun started to shine but in surprise
.................................................. .Everyone was pregnant, Even Guy's
.
Every Hospital in the whole country got an earful of screams
Sweats pouring on every patient. In Agony wishing this was a dream
Tears Stream on every Cheek. Heart Pumping so loud as Drum
Babies Coming out Wailing , Like an rose that's being Blossom
Women and Guy's feeling so relaxed, taking their babies to their home
Hearts Warm, Looking at their creature that's been trapped in their womb
Eye Lids finally shut on those toddlers face, Looking Like sleeping beauty.
While the parents sleep Humbly, they awoke by an object sitting on their belly
.
.
Hospital now facing an 2nd Attack of the "Pregnant" invasion.
Screams every-where in doctor ears. They Suggest
........................................"Even baby's should wear protection"
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ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*
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Old 08-09-05, 01:48 AM   #8
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This was feedback posted for @.

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Old 08-09-05, 05:51 AM   #9
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This was feedback posted for @.

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*relise's he should of tried/cared/gave a fuck about this battle*
 
Old 08-09-05, 03:47 PM   #10
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Meh............Uppin.............................. ..
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ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*
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Old 08-09-05, 07:16 PM   #11
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Voted For: Tweety

@.-Ok verse.Structure was good.But some lines didn't flow well.Basic rhyme scheme here and in the 2nd bar...full and still doesn't match.And what is the point of the "Pause" and "Doses off" in the middle?It was a little boring.Concept was bland.....Vocab. coulda been better too.

Tweety-Better verse.I thought it described the topic better than the @ gay.Maybe it's the bigger verse or just better wording.Rhyme scheme was better...made shit flow better.But the concept made your verse stand out.God's gun=his dick.And he shoots it out the sky and it comes down as rain.Dope.

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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203668
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Old 08-09-05, 07:59 PM   #12
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Uppin............................................. ..
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mystery Is a Freak!!

ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*
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Old 08-09-05, 08:11 PM   #13
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sorry for wasting your time and not putting in effort tweety.. i just had other things to take care of.
 
Old 08-09-05, 08:13 PM   #14
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It's all goodie goodie goodie goodie goodie goodie. Rematch soon. Cool?
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mystery Is a Freak!!

ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*
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Old 08-09-05, 08:15 PM   #15
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lol,yeh fa sho...once i get all my audio projects out the way.
 
 


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