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Old 04-29-06, 06:12 AM   #1
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Dream Life

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Wake up at dawn n' breath deep, take in the morning
Fire's cracklin' from the eggs my woman's warming
she loves me, n' shes somebody i've known so long
Long hair, pretty face.. n' lookin' cute with a kimono on
I get up slow, put on my robe while I puff 'dro
Loose clothes underneath, cotton belt's tightened up though
Gotta bit of a red nose, been sippin' sake here and there
Sit and eat my breakfast while wifey does my hair
Now, I gotta figure out where im gonna go to chill
Fireflies on the lake? maybe my pagoda on the hill?
bamboo forest? nah, I'm in the mood for something quicker..
Maybe catchin' carp for dinner in the crystal blue river.

I get rockin, so fit I ain't tired so im never stoppin'
pass the bridge and the petals droppin from the cherry blossoms
Get there but im hungry n' its a little too past noon for brunch
Guess i'll sit in a tree and eat some fresh fruit for lunch
nice snack for a dude to munch, but now lets do this
Hop into the river n' watch the fishes movements
Gotta stay damn still, make it so they feel natural
Go with the flow of the water... Keep tranquil.
The moment comes, quick as a flash, dash, catch a carp
throw it onto dry land, but thats just the start
No doubt, this acts an art that took time to aquire
Caught ten fish, now it's about time to retire.

Look up at the sky... Yeah, it's dusk.
Walking along the coastline home's a must
Strolling along the cliffs with my sack of fish
I love doin' this... I'll tell you what magic is?
It's seeing the sky lit up, then lookin' below,
and seeing sun go down n' make the sea glow
Home to my wife now its time to eat, finally...
Every night I think: Damn, what a perfect life I lead.
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Old 04-29-06, 06:13 AM   #2
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Old 04-29-06, 10:27 AM   #3
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And when did i say i was going to do your hair....lmao jp....nice flow....went real well together....flow was amazing....ah i really liked it....i didnt see anything wrong wif it so....keep up da good work boo....1
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Old 04-29-06, 05:42 PM   #4
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Thanks for the feedback
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Old 05-02-06, 09:21 PM   #5
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ok i wanna say thanks for leaving feed on my piece so im returning the favor. and let me say im glad i did. this was a really nice piece. had great imagery. creativity. and flow. structure was good. and just wanna say this was really nice. in total i liked the 2nd part the best. was really good. but at the begining i was thrown off when u said u chik was doing ur hair. i thought u was a thug and smokin the dro' but then i realized u pure chinese shit. lol dunno wut u are but wutever really nice and keep up the good work homeboy. holla for a collab.
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Old 05-03-06, 02:52 AM   #6
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Im caucasian -_-
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Old 05-08-06, 08:33 AM   #7
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Yo Tera, Long time man!

Nice shit bro... haven't read anything from you in ages man this was nice and refreshing, chilled vibe man i like your laid back style. I can see how you've pretty much got a writing style down pat, you seem really comfortable and elevated from a lot of the others here man. I think the difference is that your a 'real' emcee. It's about fuckn time for a dopium collab with You, Nos and me, dont u think. would be fuckn dope.
T it up. Dont b a stranger
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Old 05-08-06, 04:24 PM   #8
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ya braw i liked this piece really got me hooked i don't know what it was though but i liked it keep up the good work and elevate a little mad potential hey if you can take a looke at true feelings of a loving man
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Old 05-08-06, 05:51 PM   #9
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good structure made for nice flow and a good read. i think it's nice to finally see some pieces on here that don't always end in tragedy or use the word 'soul' in it. i liked it, lacked some originality but it was a nice read throughout..

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=227884
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Old 06-06-06, 09:35 PM   #10
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Your chinese.
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Old 06-06-06, 09:36 PM   #11
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I've posted pics though.
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Old 06-07-06, 05:21 AM   #12
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Lol flow is nice and easy to read, multi's were pretty good...overall i really like this piece because its good balance..lol has the slighttest emotion and i really like it... all i gotta say is you can still improve on the flow even though it was damn near perfect here, plus a little more Complexity in General and it will be perfect..but for what it is, and in my opinion on what you wanted it to be (which i dont know for shure) but its good...lol..

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Old 06-15-06, 03:12 AM   #13
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damn. that was dope. i fuckin saw everything you said omb. i miss topicals. hehe. i used to be semi-dope at em .
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Old 06-15-06, 03:55 AM   #14
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Man wtf... you are ill, but pretty dissapeared lmao.
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