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06-17-04, 01:50 PM
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Torn Apart
IP: 7A5F F697
- London, England, 1962 -
I watched as .. .. two teenagers of different ethnicity, embarked in humour .. .. a scene that would of brought tears to the face of Martin Luthor as they acted out his dream .. which i then stared & admired .. .. sensing the love & friendship, captured in those flares of sapphire in the young, black girls eyes .. as she concentrated intensly .. .. hanging from every single word that her caucasian friend speaks. They conversated intellectually .. the male gazing a while .. .. to marvel at the beauty, held inside her radiant smile. The expressions on both their faces, showed true romantic bliss .. .. as the couple paused for a moment .. to hold hands and kiss. The couple walked carelessly, through emerald blades of grass .. .. when suddenly .. A group of white youths came wading past. Eight surrounded his girlfriend .. One stood infront of him .. .. then hurled racial abuse; based on the colour of her skin. This was more than he could take; so he finally lashed out .. .. but in just a matter of seconds .. He was beaten back down. Their attention turned to the female; she started crying at once .. .. the group kicked and punched her, til she was lying in blood The male was injured badly .. couldnt manage even a step .. .. and so he had to lie helpless; as she was beaten to death. - London, England, 2004 - He'll be fourty three this year - but the pain he's felt .. .. still tugs on his hearts strings .. as he blames himself & each night before he sleeps, he kisses a picture of her .. .. not afraid of the arrogant, that label him "Nigger lover" He saw the bigger picture & loved what he saw faced w. him .. .. It's just a shame their hearts, were Torn Apart by racism.
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06-19-04, 02:36 PM
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IP: 7A5F F697
lol thinking these herbs will understand..
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06-19-04, 03:27 PM
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IP: DF7B C8F7
Great clear piece with a solid flow. This was awesome. Obviously a sad story but it was really well done. What I really enjoyed of this piece was the vocabularly and descriptive lines.
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I have read over stuff u have done and I have been like WOW, but for some reason I wasnt wowing at this, is was a great piece none the less tho. |
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06-19-04, 06:41 PM
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~AlmoSt iLLeGAL~
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IP: 7C15 C1EB
loved it dawg, ya i seen some of your other shit, your good man. keep it up,
*PeacE*
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06-19-04, 06:46 PM
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retired.
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IP: 3CE3 5668
very nice.
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06-20-04, 08:20 AM
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GrOwN aSs MaN
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IP: 6554 3D5D
UNORIGINAL...this was a rip-off of a piece I did.
nuff said |
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06-20-04, 01:10 PM
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IP: DF7B C8F7
Baron is so dope someone bit his legends piece and used in a topical torny.
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06-20-04, 01:27 PM
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Light Weight
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IP: B90F 540D
bloody hell..
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06-20-04, 03:27 PM
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Umm...Yeah
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IP: 5043 32F4
wow that madd hot!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!
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06-20-04, 03:33 PM
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Light Weight
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IP: 6D0E 69D5
this was good... solid multis carried the flow...
best part was the story... well told with even pacing... not sure it was mad fire... as far as creative rhymes... not saying the rhymes were bad... they just didn't have much wordplay i guess... why did you bother posting this here? I dunno...
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