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check ..

i am guessing this is me?? if it is check check

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I remember puttin quarters in the game and the Jukebox/
now i'm puttin quarters of them thangs in a shoe box/
Then i break em down no bags its just loose rocks/
no pump against me and the world i'm like 2pac
^^T-Rex

my internet was down most of the day yesterday but if it is straight i can key up a verse real quick...

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I remember puttin quarters in the game and the Jukebox/
now i'm puttin quarters of them thangs in a shoe box/
Then i break em down no bags its just loose rocks/
no pump against me and the world i'm like 2pac
^^T-Rex

key'd up

I'll put cha face in the dirt...i'm rapein this pussy, bitch pull up ya skirt/
this shit is the worst..but you a herb and i'm not, yes, The Truth really Hurts/
you battlin a vet..you aint posin a threat...there's no way you can have this win/
it seem like every time i turn around you in a battle or votin for the person you battlin!/
fuckin pus, this shit ain't a game, your elementary style you should be ashamed/
from the simple metaphors to the outrageous play in ya name/
if that is wordplay than playing wit words is somethin that i don't wanna do/
But hol up






































let me drop down so i can be on the same level as you/
you win by no-shows, you won't go far after my verse busta/
tryin to be cool by votin for your opponent its obvious D.S. is a Dick Sucka/

e.z...

*lost to the truth hurts

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I remember puttin quarters in the game and the Jukebox/
now i'm puttin quarters of them thangs in a shoe box/
Then i break em down no bags its just loose rocks/
no pump against me and the world i'm like 2pac
^^T-Rex

Eh D.Stroyer no-shows

v/Da saviour

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2004 Poet of the year
3X writer of the month

^^^ can i get some criticism??

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I remember puttin quarters in the game and the Jukebox/
now i'm puttin quarters of them thangs in a shoe box/
Then i break em down no bags its just loose rocks/
no pump against me and the world i'm like 2pac
^^T-Rex

I'll put cha face in the dirt...i'm rapein this pussy, bitch pull up ya skirt/
this shit is the worst..but you a herb and i'm not, yes, The Truth really Hurts/
eh i get what you saying here even withou the explantations but the punch wsnt really delivered that hard so it made for a meh punch
you battlin a vet..you aint posin a threat...there's no way you can have this win/
it seem like every time i turn around you in a battle or votin for the person you battlin!/
eh didnt realy like this.. wording was bad n the punch aint really connect/ aint make to much sence
fuckin pus, this shit ain't a game, your elementary style you should be ashamed/
from the simple metaphors to the outrageous play in ya name/
This was alright... alot better then the other two punches so far
if that is wordplay than playing wit words is somethin that i don't wanna do/
let me drop down so i can be on the same level as you/
eh okay concept but your wording made it not connect really... set up was iight punch was eh
you win by no-shows, you won't go far after my verse busta/
tryin to be cool by votin for your opponent its obvious D.S. is a Dick Sucka/
this was coo.

Iigh theres your feed hope it helps ya out man... you just need to elevate a bit and you'll be all set..

Hit up my battle with that indian dude spul

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-CS- -
Stayin Fresh Til Death
- Think you can write?
SIGN UP FOR WAYT NOW!!!

5x PS HOF
2004 Poet of the year
3X writer of the month

sorry about that guys, there was something important that came up & i had to go ASAP n was not able to write a verse nothing n again sorry bout the no-show, it won't happen again next week