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08-04-08, 01:59 PM | #6 | ||
Thank You, Come Again
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You didn't stick to a single... subject for me..
You went from anger at step dad.. to playing madden.. to rap.. all out of nowhere. This and the simple rhyme scheme make it feel like a commercial rap song. Hell, maybe it'd catch on there if you revamped the lyrics and honed the focus of the song. Keep writing and get better
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