http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...7968#post987968


Been through loves most aggresive anger
I'll always love u its kinda tough being a romantic gangsta
I sit down in this harsh word to think about Loves lessons, love is neither aggressive nore jeaolous, u and my son are my greatest possesions
Damn its kinda sad how i lost my boo, but baby girl 3 words describe how I feel "I-LOVE-YOU"

some quick short poetry keystyle

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short but still sweet.. i think u should keep it goin it'd prob be pretty decent..simple but nice structure..u could improve the vocab tho...keep it goin kid..i like this..lata..

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my head is clouded with senseless doubt
but this seems to be my only escape route
so ill slither my way across the ground
to avoid my blyndedsoul from being found
~*~YOU LIVE YOU LEARN~*~

yea i did this in couple minutez and i just posted is just a lil piece thnx for the feedback resp.

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GhOsT - WrITeRZ
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Fools On My Dick I aSSur You I got Chrome that'll leave your body count high-in-debt...
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this was short and simple. a pure vent, made of emotions and not much else. with a piece layed down so simple and straight forward theres not much one can say on them. them message was simple, but strong, and i felt you did a good job showing why u feel that way. it would be a good piece to add on and expand.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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thnx........

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GhOsT - WrITeRZ
..Kidz I'll Cease to Spit 'Vowelz' An let the 'Eyez'-Inspect...
Fools On My Dick I aSSur You I got Chrome that'll leave your body count high-in-debt...
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