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Old 10-25-05, 05:40 AM   #1
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Vendetta - Thinking About

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This is the first track off of my demo to IDJ...just some relationship type shit that everyone should be able to relate to...check it out and enjoy


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Old 10-25-05, 11:49 AM   #2
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aiigh...mellow start to the beat

quality cud be upped...crisper vocals etc...

ur voice fits this track...but ur tone bordered on monotonous...and, as melodic as this beat was, it should have been easy to have a flow with a varied pitch


lyrics are str8


good track dawg


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Old 10-25-05, 08:57 PM   #3
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Old 10-25-05, 10:08 PM   #4
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you know i had to peep nigga...im feelin ya lyrics one of the only unactive RV heads postin audios thats doper than alot of niggas who be here daily..good shit you doin ya thing ...feeling that damn chorus omg.. lmao imma play this shit over props
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Old 10-25-05, 10:25 PM   #5
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Okay beat selection was on point.....flow & delivery is very lloyd bankish....u tried to mask ya delivery's monotonenes wit slightly hyper dubs...same thing banks does....really in my opinion the beat is cray this song....u follow its rhythm nicely so wit a beat this strong you'll get by jus cuz the beat is ill but I'm being real wit u cuz this is something u gon submit on a demo....this aint got me jumping out my seat..cuz its good but it aint new....I feel like I dun heard it before.....lyrically u came VERY predictable u said everything any other average emcee woulda said over this beat...no twists in ya plot jus the same song.....dun get me wrong I aint hating cuz I dun hear dplenty of ya shit u aint posted an was feeling it but this was uninspired an unoriginal to me....really all I can say is try to put MORE OF YOU in ya music...alot of niggas get caught in writing shit thats currently selling becuz if another nigga is eating off that style thats obviously the style people want...naw son...BE YOU an you'll be good....this track jus didn't do it for me son...no hate.
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Old 10-26-05, 02:15 AM   #6
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first thing to hit me was the quality

verse kicks in first. voice is kinda boring. real monotone like. but then again theres a lot of rappers who sound like that.

your voice matches your beat.

chorus comes in. not really doing it for me.

2nd verse - kinda reminds me of banks. lol. lyric wise this wasnt like whoa. but its a simple song for a girl so it'll do.


overall this was your average song to a girl. i could hear it on mtv along with all those other songs like that.


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