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Beat: Hardkore Beats
Hook: Tha Q
Mixing: Tha Q
Sample: beginning, Native American War Dance Chant

Lyrics: Verses 1 & 2...Tha Q


**I chose a native american theme because the beat relfected it...almost like I'm an indian chief leading his tribe...jus my concept


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Intro:


I like the native american sample at the begining , it works with the beat...feelin the vibe....and also the drums kind of build up to summin intresting..so im feelin that...

First Verse:

lol at you tryin to the chant...iigh you come in...feelin the flow..delivery is good "clangin the chains together, like anne frank" liked that bit...like the lil sound effects you add to it...flow is staying pretty on line..fell of one bit but its ok..

Hook:

Hook is pretty good...likin the lil dubbs u add...

2nd verse:

likin the first 2 lines, seems a lil more rushed, flow is good, the bruce lee line was good...liked how u switchin the flow...thats what im tryin to work on..

Quality:

its very good, 10/10 for quality

Outro:

Liked that you added more chants...mixed in well to the track..

Overall:

8/10

Verdict: good track, flow was on point most of the track, fell of once which I can remember, delivery and precence good...keep up

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Q...listening...hm @ intro lol...nice pick works well wit the title of the track...boppin my head jus to the intro lmao

anyways...still waitin lol beats in...lol @ you impersonating...delivery into verse cool...rhymes aight...lyrics are cool as per...nice track had to download...but this was worth it...nice ish...

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Checkin....Like The Intro Lol..........Beat COmes In...Lol @ U Goin Heya Here You Start rapping like he way you come in like your style here the adlibs sblend in well this has good emotion in it good delivery presence is dope lol like your lyrics the hook comes back again like this hook lol its catchy but blends as well 2nd verse on....Lyrics again good with good delivery,good presence i like your delivery seems to be more dark on this verse ya know?hooks back!!!!lol u kno0w what i think of the hook
Overall: 8/10

RTF on my rebirth track plz!!!....

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flow always on point from what ive peeped from you. you remind me too much of my dude curtisey...the title for all ya songs be havin dope meanings good shit to do lol...peep his shit out ...www.soundclick.com/curtisey ...kids voice a lil deeper than yours but yall remind me so much of eachother in certain ways..it'd be a dope collab to hear..But ne who im feeling your similies used good shit.

K...be sure to give him my page too

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Listening...

Beats nice...flow is on point as usualy...lyrics are good...I vocals seemed a little loud, but maybe that was just my speakers...delivery was tight.

Overall, hot track. You never dissapoint me.

Word.

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ok, its startin
and I feel a connection to the intro, because my grand father was native american

your liln voice intro was weak though

your quality is weird.
your actual verse quality is good, but yo addlibs and dubs sound weird, and the hook sound weird too

but the ACTUAL song is aiigh, the 2nd verse SHITS on the 2nd verse.
the 2nd verse is dope as hell.
but when it comes to the entire song as a whole, you could've done WAAAAY better.
but its still aiigh, Better then the shit sheif been floodin the damn song forum with

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yea..for the hook, I used a different effect...I didn't like it after I had listened to it

so yea...


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