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05-13-04, 05:41 AM | #1 | |||||||
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"WHITE HOUSE" Deep Poem About Blackkman's Struggle
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I get so fuckkin frustrated wid this society sometimes... This is how I feel ya'll... Plz drop feedbackk...
Oh yeah, this aint a racist poem. I aint racist. Don't take it as dat. "White House" i see you my nigga i see your hurt your pain your curse your rage i see in you what you see in me i see a society filled with rats and snakes and i aint talkin’ ‘bout animals i’m talkin’ ‘bout folks that don’t come ‘round these ways mr president mr president help me get this felony off of my record help me feed my children help me become a new person let me be me how are we supposed to learn from our mistakes if you don’t give us the chance to change? you aint nuthin’ but a pussy ass racist ass punk ass bitch stay your ass in that white house that white man’s house that make more fight between the people we don’t like house that aint no martin luther malik shabazz or jesse jacksons stepping foot in this house house yeah i can see my niggaz i can see my niggaz hating themselves hating each other hating one another hating their fathers their mothers our sisters our brothers then you wonder why i need a little puff on some weed to stop myself from letting that bomb go off in that white man’s house you wonder why id rather die than forfeit my mind to your devious lies how come i have to suffer because of your mistakes? i’ve got enough mistakes of my own that your still making me face to this day i would never shake the president’s hand i learned from the indians not to fall for that one hey come here buddy! let me shake your hand! shake your land shake you up outta this place today put you in a concentration camp like them niggaz that was in that concentration camp called the south for three hundred some odd years working hard for that white man so he can stay in that white man’s house and run his white ass mouth down in that white ass south well now you’ve got our backs against the wall we can sell drugs but we can’t go to college we can get drafted to your army when it calls but we can’t live our lives from our own knowledge knowledge is the key to success well where’s my key? the only key i ever got is the one that your gonna throw away after putting me in a cage like some wild beast then you tell me that i’ve got the problem i’m the fuck up i’m a threat to society NO you are the threat to society my society i have to live on these streets i have to lie on job applications about being convicted for some shit that i was forced to do because of YOUR society my society was fine until you came along and fucked up MY society you’re a muthafuckin’ joke i hope you burn i hope you choke on hell smoke i hope that white house burns down with that white man in it no i hope your whole society burns down i hope you know that the only reason that i’m so angry is because you won’t let me grow
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05-14-04, 06:34 AM | #2 | |||||||
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Damn ya'll... Stop Sleepin! lOl
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05-14-04, 10:05 AM | #3 | ||||||
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That Was very deep...I Liek It When You Do Shit Like Thiz Tay...LoL...Uppin
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05-17-04, 09:43 AM | #4 | |||||||
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More Feed?
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05-18-04, 03:45 PM | #5 | |||||||
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Rise my ghetto child... RRRRIIIIIIIIIIIIISSSSEEE!!
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05-18-04, 05:04 PM | #6 | ||||||
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yo i like it and i kno u not racist but i jus always wanted to kno why blacks blame white people all the time wen my family wasnt here till 1910 and were worse off then they ever were for 30 years. im italian but every black person i kno jus thinks of me as white i jus wana kno why they dont recognize italians as different wen they recognize mexicans dominicans and indians
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05-18-04, 05:46 PM | #7 | ||||
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ehh... Any poetry with swearing is not poetry... And i don't like your approach to it.. Your structure was nasty looking. It was deep, but it was expressed wrong. You had a lot of anger, maybe too much... but thats just my opinion. And though you say we are racist you are just as racist... Obviously... And you cant say you arent racist... because look at that.. LOL... shaky drop...
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05-18-04, 08:27 PM | #8 | |||||||
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well i understand where your coming from and i know your not racist...im black to...and so i felt it on a different level na mean thought your structure for this poem was a little off i know where you was coming from and going with it work on your structure and maybe controlling your words a lil lol
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05-19-04, 05:08 AM | #9 | ||||||||
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Ok... Try this on for size... My wife is White, and my daughter is half... How can I be racist?... Also, da thang I been taught by all my literature teachers is dat there is one rule when it comes to poetry and dat is dat "There are no rules". U can structure and say w/e you want in w/e way you want. Jus so ya know, this poem is written in blues form... Ya know, da same way some of Langston Hughes, Nikki Giovanni, and da majority of Def Poets write in at times. U mean to tell me Def Poets don't never have no profanity in they poems? I learnt this structure in an African American Literature course dat I took a while backk, so I think it's pretty legit. Basically, there are prolly reasons why some of ya'll won't relate. 1, you prolly aint blackk... 2, you prolly live in da suburbs... 3, u never been in trouble wid da law... 4, u may not understand or have seen da position dat da US society has us in (those dat are trapped in da ghetto)... Thanx for da feedbackk doe... All opinions are appreciated... PIC OF ME AND MY DAUGHTER, JUS TO PROVE MY POINT, AND TO SHOW HER OFF, COZ SHE IS SSSSOOOOOOO CUTE! JUS LIKE HER DADDY! LOL
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05-19-04, 09:56 AM | #10 | ||||||
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yo this was a good piece....not bat imager and it had good emotion keep it up man
can you peep the 5 pieces i have in here.....thanks |
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05-20-04, 11:36 AM | #11 | |||||||
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Uppin.....................................
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05-21-04, 10:00 AM | #12 | |||||||
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beautiful tay..tell the critic to sukk a dic
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05-26-04, 03:57 PM | #13 | |||||||
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^^Ketch 22 says ya'll critics can Suckk a Dickk... And Tay agrees... U cockksuckkin homos... lOl... Uppin
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05-26-04, 03:59 PM | #14 | |||
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Hmmm wasnt fellin it much very short and Fell off quite alot.Not very Organized.
4.342/10
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05-26-04, 04:30 PM | #15 | |||
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That was fucking heavy shit mate, I was feeling that shit coz Tony Blair is
the fucking same, And it's not a dig at white people its a dig at the govement for letting it's people live their lives not knowing what the fuck is going to happen next. I have been writing poem's for ages and I was always told that anything goes it's how the writer wants you to interpret it, not how the reader think's it should be written... See my shit rewind haven't had any feedback on that shit.. |
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